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The following are documents submitted by this user:

#	Document	Channel
1	Blood Chronicles: The Hitman	Fiction
2	Omega Squadron.	Fiction
3	Prologue: The Prisoner from Q-1	Fiction
4	The Conflict Inside	Fiction
5	The Lonely Outpost 2; CYBORG	Fiction
6	The Value of Life	Fiction

The following are comments posted by this user:

#1. Posted on June 05, 2008 02:52 PM. lol, just ignore IHZ, he's a bitter cynic. You're story line is brilliant, especially because you attribute things to the different species without actually describing their physical attributes which lets people know that these things are elsewhere but it doesn't let you know what they look like or what they can do. Of course, in your actual story you'll need to flesh it out more. But indeed it was "innovative" which gets an EXCEPTIONAL from me. GAMBIT ... Click here to view this comment.

#2. Posted on June 03, 2008 01:06 PM. I didn't think that it was your best work yet. I think that in trying to keep a more flowing battle and trying to move the story along, you glossed over it maybe a little too much, but that's just a matter of opinion. The plot looked good and the soldiers seemed ok, but the council scenes seemed a little surreal. And why couldn't they just pull their troops back until the bomb went off and then re attack? Still liked it though. #good# clone98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#3. Posted on November 29, 2007 03:24 PM. sweeeet. I'll be watching. ... Click here to view this comment.

#4. Posted on November 28, 2007 12:16 PM. Wait X9, I thought it was good, I was just saying what I didn't like with it. ... Click here to view this comment.

#5. Posted on November 26, 2007 12:40 PM. LOL For making my day after a crap day of school, I vote exceptional. Here's to Shi**ing on cars! CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#6. Posted on November 26, 2007 12:33 PM. What does Russian Roulette have to do with anything? Aside from the odd name, however, it was pretty darn good. But in my opinion it didn't really evoke enough interest as a prologue, which is the point of a prologue, to set up the next piece. If this was the beginning of a full-length story then it would be fine, but as a prologue it was kind of *yawn* boring. I still voted Exceptional. CLONE 98 SERVE YOUR MAKER ... Click here to view this comment.

#7. Posted on November 26, 2007 12:11 PM. OMG!!! RYEMCRORY!!! So good to see u again. WAY too many noobs around writing stuff that you could scrape off of a Blizzard Game designers crap. This however, was nice. Way way too short, but nice either way. Good job at retaining the mood of the story and the mood of Packard and his total 'detached interest'. It was pretty cool. You had a goodly amount of details without going over the top. Another thing that I really liked was the technology (ESPECIALLY THE EYEPIECE ZOMG!). An idea for ... Click here to view this comment.

#8. Posted on November 05, 2007 09:23 AM. It was actually kind of lame... I think that if you're going to write a diary for a resocced marine whose brain is fried and has the vocabulary of a five year old, whatever. If you're going to write like him, fine, as long as there's something truly original, funny, or intriguing about it. There wasn't anything even remotely funny, original, or interesting here. Sorry, but below average. CLONE 98 serve your maker ... Click here to view this comment.

#9. Posted on August 20, 2007 08:12 AM. LOL, I thought he was counting to five! funny. ... Click here to view this comment.

#10. Posted on August 20, 2007 07:56 AM. Hey Seven, the only reason that I was so harsh is because I know that he's a good author, and somewhat a friend of mine. If ever I read some of your stories, I won't be nearly as harsh, no worries. ... Click here to view this comment.

#11. Posted on August 19, 2007 02:03 PM. The new Dark Templar are awesome, now they look more intimidating, dangerous looking, cooler. I think the change was for the better, sort of making the Dark Templar more warrior-like. Fricking awesome. FROM BIRTH CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#12. Posted on July 14, 2007 12:38 PM. yes there is... some... er... vaguely unknown and unusual form.... the life part is in question... sentient? Uh... ... Click here to view this comment.

#13. Posted on July 10, 2007 08:44 AM. friendly fire... isn't... But ok. I get it now. You've moved up to 6 and a half out of ten, average. CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#14. Posted on July 09, 2007 03:36 PM. U just keep getting better and better and better and better and better and better and better... and better... Nice work, this is probably my favorite piece that you've written yet. Exceptional, DUH CLONE98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#15. Posted on July 09, 2007 03:17 PM. BATCHELOR'S BACK!!! Looks good to me. I didn't notice any major grammer oir spilling errs. But then again, I've never been good at grammar 'nyways. 'nuff said. The story moved along well with nice introduction and development of characters, establishment of setting, etc. Very nice. Also, a very original idea. One thing that I would comment on is that you probably shouldn't have mentioned that Stephan was a pirate just yet. Maybe you should've hinted at his past, had them mention a few thin ... Click here to view this comment.

#16. Posted on June 30, 2007 05:37 PM. spoilsport, you have no sense of sarcasm... ... Click here to view this comment.

#17. Posted on June 30, 2007 05:34 PM. '"I'll nuke ya head someday..."' Not if I nuke you first... ... Click here to view this comment.

#18. Posted on June 30, 2007 05:33 PM. sounds kewl... What do they mean harvest rotation? ... Click here to view this comment.

#19. Posted on June 30, 2007 05:32 PM. LOL, that's the freaking poind MedavassD ... Click here to view this comment.

#20. Posted on June 29, 2007 12:47 PM. Meh... Odd.. But good. In way too many areas you used the word "lied", instead of "lay". such as: farm town lied to his right, back-dropping the mysterious frozen woods that lied a dozen yards away from his position. goodness... ridiculous grammar, and it doesn't sound good... The story was good, but the marines were ridiculous. Leaning over made his joints crack? What is he? fifty? And then he spends the rest of the time thinking about some hot chick he screwed ... Click here to view this comment.

#21. Posted on June 29, 2007 08:28 AM. Leveling heroes? Sweetness. Now I can pawn your stupid Kerrigan with my level 50 Jimmy Raynor, now watch him singlehandedly rip through 100 sunken colonies and kill 50 ultralisks and lose 1 health... The point being, hero leveling would be kewl as long as heroes aren't uber powerful. It would be frustrating if you had a huge army of fifty BC's eighty siege tanks, 200 marines and they all got owned by one hero. ... Click here to view this comment.

#22. Posted on June 27, 2007 08:51 AM. what parts were confusing, you say... Well, kind of what DoctorOctopus put up... The vocab's a little high for us NORMAL people... But come to think of it. does that thing that DocOc submitted mean that the Zerg fired a yamato gun at a BC? oh well... A STILL CONFUSED CLONE98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#23. Posted on June 26, 2007 01:13 PM. Yah, Tiki Barber was awesome... until he ran into the Eagles defense... Goodness, he got slaughtered. But I saw him the game before (What was it against, the Redskins? I forget), and he was awesome. So glad you appreciate my team. ;-) CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#24. Posted on June 26, 2007 01:12 PM. Very, very good as usual, Tom, but somewhere (I forget where) you spelled lightning wrong, just thought to let you kno. ~EXCEPTIONAL~ CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#25. Posted on June 25, 2007 09:30 AM. uhh... what? Im losted.... I have no clue what way's up in this story... Goodness you're evil, you're gonna mess up more than a few brains with this prologue. CLONE 98 A CONFUSED CLONE ... Click here to view this comment.

#26. Posted on June 25, 2007 06:20 AM. hmmm... While we're at it... If you're trying to get the emotion of war, then you have to make it gruesome. There are lots of people burned out by war because of all the blood and gore, so why should the future be any different? If you're working the peopleses emotions, have them see a massacre of marines or medics or something, it works for emotions because then they get survivor guilt or whatever... I dunno, when people see people die, there's a high emotion factor, something you could tune in ... Click here to view this comment.

#27. Posted on June 25, 2007 06:15 AM. Who was the Giants player who retired last year? The running back... I forget... But us Eagles beated you by a field goal ;-) ... Click here to view this comment.

#28. Posted on June 22, 2007 07:17 AM. Thanx, but... I am an American, I actually live quite close to Pittsburgh (my neighbors are Steelers fans *grrr*, Eagles man). But the Pittsburgh in my story was meant to be the one somewhere out in space. Shortness? I guess so, I'll work on it for my next installment. ... Click here to view this comment.

#29. Posted on June 22, 2007 07:06 AM. L-U-C-K-Y!!!!! 2 the people who are going, anyway... *sigh*, will us lower-class people with less moneys in our pockets always feel this way? "I'd rather spend it on my Tychus Findlay statue" good point, because Tychus will be around long after the blizzcon, and you can cuddle him in bed for many, many blizzcons to com, not just one. ... Click here to view this comment.

#30. Posted on June 21, 2007 02:27 PM. I sort of agree, when I heard it was coming out it's like, "OK, whatever, cool." But either way... I'M A BANANA!!!!!!1!1!111111!!!!!!@!#!@$23543%7^%*&98)&( ... Click here to view this comment.

#31. Posted on June 21, 2007 02:26 PM. Thanks (I think this is the highest you've ever rated one of my stories), I thought there was some city on some planet in the Korpurlu sector named Pittsburgh... Maybe I was mistaken. I think maybe you forgot to read the beginning, this is pretty much the second piece in a trilogy, the beginning and reasons will be stated in the next installment. OK, I'll take the Men in Black reference out. Need a plot twist? Gladly. CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#32. Posted on June 19, 2007 11:09 AM. OK, I'm back... Look, to spell it out plainly, it was too short, it had a high 'cheese' factor, and it lacked detail... sorry, but that's it... The reasons? He just wakes up and goes down, before the fight can even begin the Zerg attack, you should've used that, have him get in, set off his 'nuke' and then his 'mission' goes wrong and he's blasting Zerglings when one of them explodes in blood, "That's strange, he thought, then he realized the truth." WE GOT ZERG! or something. ... Click here to view this comment.

#33. Posted on June 19, 2007 11:06 AM. Indeed, about two weeks ago there was like, 20 stories that came out in a single week, it was madness trying to review them all. But the site will pick up activity, especially before and after the SC2 release. ... Click here to view this comment.

#34. Posted on June 18, 2007 06:09 PM. Hmmm.... Interesting... Before I say anything else, I think that this story could've benefited from some more time in the "shop" (a.k.a., editing and adding to it). I'll give you a full review either tomorrow morning or later today, but it is good, just not your best work ever. ... Click here to view this comment.

#35. Posted on June 18, 2007 01:55 PM. oh yes, I forgot that one... Yo darkone, no matter what people say on this site, you gotta make your own style and stick with it, it's the sign of a good author, leave your mark, your style, on every piece of fiction you write. Yah Tom, don't you just hate people who look at (perhaps)lame pieces and just blast it, even when they've done nothing better, just to be mean, and then they get all gay about it, just bugs me out. Look at hydrophonic's art if you can, people like AtomicKitten and ILO ... Click here to view this comment.

#36. Posted on June 18, 2007 01:53 PM. *WOOT* *WOOT* DASHRENDAER!!! At first I thought it was just me who hated ILOVELAMP and AtomicKitten for being fags, now I know it's not. Yah, hydro, your legs are good, your arms aren't, the quality sucks, the truth and nothing but the truth, just work on the arms and see what you can do about the scanner quality. CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#37. Posted on June 18, 2007 01:47 PM. ILOVELAMP calling people faggots? Wow, that's a real shocker... honestly, you have no room to talk, whatsoever, you haven't even posted anything on this site, anything at all. And I bet you think you're tough, blasting this kid just because everyone else is doing it, you're not, no matter what your momma says at night in her room. GET A LIFE, ILOVELAMP CLONE 98 BTW, hydrophonic, it's an average pic that could use some work, but I see potential. ... Click here to view this comment.

#38. Posted on June 16, 2007 12:19 PM. Ok, OK, maybe my SC history isn't up to buff, but still, the 'toss are a high and mighty race, seeing as how they're packing more than half the firepower, you'd think that there'd be at least a protoss second-in command, or something. thanks for pointing that out. SERVE YER MAKER, LANDLUBBERS! CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#39. Posted on June 16, 2007 12:07 PM. There, fixed some of the above mentioned ... Click here to view this comment.

#40. Posted on June 16, 2007 11:48 AM. I think that this warrants a sequel, most definitely warrants a sequel, there's some good stuff here. One problem that I see recurring in your work, however, is either unrealistic or too-little detailed events... The two drunken men unsteadily hurried forward to the girl as the man the drunks were trying to shake down for money stood and surveyed the scene. The unlucky female realized what the alcoholics had in store and screamed for help, only to have the bar silenced to watch her be strippe ... Click here to view this comment.

#41. Posted on June 16, 2007 07:37 AM. Thanks for commenting, I'm quite glad to get an overall "good" on this story, since at first I was expecting average, first person point of view... not really my thing, but I'm working on it... OK, some long sentences, I'll work on it for my next piece (maybe coming out next week, assuming I'm not doing too much) The part about his mother, what I meant by that sentence was that his mother used to say that he exuded an air of danger about him, his translation a hint of barbarity a ... Click here to view this comment.

#42. Posted on June 15, 2007 09:25 AM. LOL, very, very nice... The naked chick is a plus ... Click here to view this comment.

#43. Posted on June 15, 2007 09:24 AM. beautiful ... Click here to view this comment.

#44. Posted on June 15, 2007 09:13 AM. congratulations, Ecyor0, BTW, nice story. ~exceptional~ SERVE YOUR SERVER CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#45. Posted on June 15, 2007 09:03 AM. HOW CAN YOU PEOPLE SAY AVERAGE, IN HONOR OF CRAZYOLDMAN, I COMMAND YOU TO VOTE EXCEPTIONAL, THIS MUST GET ONTO THE POP FIC LIST... OR ELSE!!! ... Click here to view this comment.

#46. Posted on June 15, 2007 09:00 AM. exposition? Look, I have a bigger vocabulary than literally ALL of my peers and I still don't know what that word means... Goodness... But I get what you mean, if you're writing a large series than you can't realistically have action everywhere, I get that, it's just that it was still a boring chapter, can't wait for your next 1. SERVE YOUR SERVER CLONE 98 BTW I have a story waiting to be approved, could you do me a favor and when it comew out, read and critique? Thx. ... Click here to view this comment.

#47. Posted on June 15, 2007 08:55 AM. Good, get working immediately, I expect another story to cause us SC addicts to burst into spontaneous laughter next week... good luck. ... Click here to view this comment.

#48. Posted on June 13, 2007 08:39 AM. Uh... Was it supposed to be a comedy? ... Click here to view this comment.

#49. Posted on June 13, 2007 08:31 AM. I liked it a lot, a new kind of story with lots of action, it could've been helped along with some realism and more detail, but it was still good. One question, however, why would the Protoss willingly submit to Terran control? A Protoss would rather die alone than fight under a Terran... Just seemed weird to me. Good story though... ~HIGH GOOD~ SERVE YOUR SERVER CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#50. Posted on June 12, 2007 04:04 PM. Nice, but who's he supposed to be talking to? Actually the Protoss owe the Terrans quite a bit, and if the Protoss are so darned perfect, how come they lost their home world? I know, I'm probably in over my head here, but I have faith in the Terrans (and Blizzard)... But on the whole, very nice, very well put, interesting to delve into the Protoss perspective of things for once. ~exceptional~ SERVE YOUR SERVER CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#51. Posted on June 12, 2007 01:09 PM. "cant believe people like comedy more than an actual story =P oh well. Guess I better get onto that next comedy?? Oh yes, we do. Stories are awesome but comedies make us laugh, we like laughing more than awesomeness I guess. And yes, you should make another comedy... SERVE YOUR SERVER CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#52. Posted on June 12, 2007 01:07 PM. Spoken like a true riot enciter, Pytum... WHERE'S THE NEW LAYOUT??!?!?!? ... Click here to view this comment.

#53. Posted on June 12, 2007 10:22 AM. ok, average... ... Click here to view this comment.

#54. Posted on June 12, 2007 10:20 AM. OK then, read it... Looks pretty good, still exceptional, no problems that I saw, but *yawn*, it was a pretty boring chapter nonetheless... ... Click here to view this comment.

#55. Posted on June 11, 2007 07:09 PM. What the Heck? LOL exceptional for the heck of it. IN THE NAME OF THE CRAZYOLDMAN!!! ... Click here to view this comment.

#56. Posted on June 11, 2007 07:08 PM. YAY DREAMWARDEN HAS COME AGAIN TO HAUNT MY DREAMS WITH STORIES OF RAYNOR!!! but yeah, good but not exceptional, your story could've really benefited from some (more like a lot) of dscription, if you had just put a little more description in it might've been exceptional material, but for now, mid-good. SERVE YOUR SERVER CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#57. Posted on June 11, 2007 07:04 PM. I agree with all said, the plot seemed a little generic, too little was said about the main character, could probably use some better wording in areas, but this is just minor stuff. Your knowledge, and detail get good points, I see potential, welcome to the site! LIGHT GOOD SERVE YOUR SERVER! CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#58. Posted on June 11, 2007 06:57 PM. YESH, I SPOTTED THE SC2 REFERENCE(S)!!!!! I'M SPEDCIAL, OH YESH I YAM!!! LOL Nice story, I'll probably finish it sometime tomorrow and give it a full critique. Looks pretty good so far, voted exceptional SERVE YOUR SERVER CLONE 98 P.S. IMMORTAL'S ROCK, OR ARE GONNA ROCK 'NYWAYS!!! ... Click here to view this comment.

#59. Posted on June 09, 2007 08:55 AM. It was so stupid it was funny, for some reason I liked it.... ... Click here to view this comment.

#60. Posted on June 09, 2007 08:50 AM. SMIFFY'S BACK, THAT ALONE IS REASON ENOUGH TO GIVE THIS STORY EXCEPTIONAL WITHOUT READING IT!!!! I'll probably stick around and read it later, but the beginning looks good. SERVE YOUR SERVER CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#61. Posted on June 09, 2007 08:48 AM. I liked the story, mainly due to the flow, but the storyine seems to be (like X9 said) a little phony, actually (in my humble opinion), a lot phony. But it IS original, which is my main factor, so while it doesn't get exceptional, it gets a mid-good. Want to see seqwel. SERVE YOUR SERVER CLONE 98 P.S. One more thing, it seemed to move a little too fast at the end, "Oh, we found an overmind which might be able to revive him." "Let's go." ... Click here to view this comment.

#62. Posted on June 09, 2007 08:42 AM. Uhhh... A little strange for me... stick people??? In Starcraft??? Uhh.... I don't know what to say... ... Click here to view this comment.

#63. Posted on June 09, 2007 08:41 AM. Aww, c'mon Tom, be nice, he's just a newb. BTW darkone, u got talent, just keep working on it and some day u 2 will make pop fic. ... Click here to view this comment.

#64. Posted on June 07, 2007 02:11 PM. For a beginner, it's Good. First things first, check your spelling and grammar, it made certain parts of the story somewhat... confusing. Like ghost32 said, it WAS a nice story and it was pretty original too. Some things to work on would be description (you had some, but in fan fic you really have to layer it on), dialogue ("GET DOWN!" Barked Corporal Tucker, hitting the ground with a thud.), and flow. The missile turret behind Tycho erupted in a massive belch of flame as the z ... Click here to view this comment.

#65. Posted on June 05, 2007 12:43 PM. Exceptional, nice to see you with another installment. But just one thing, however, although it was exceptional, it wasn't my favorite piece ever, probably because of the lack of action I guess. CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#66. Posted on June 05, 2007 12:41 PM. I say Average and I'm being nice. Some writers' stories flow and you go along with them, yours grabs people and forces them to go there, in other words, too much pointing out obvious, just stating the action, lack of elaboration etc. NEEDS MORE DESCRIPTION!!! I actually like the story so far and ghost-medics sound interesting (you could have introduced them better), thus average. But one more thing, do you honestly think that a ghost would let itself be shot just like that? Not only that, but wh ... Click here to view this comment.

#67. Posted on June 05, 2007 12:35 PM. Sorry to bust your bubble, but I read this yesterday, thought BA, re-read it today and thought Average. I agree with Dococ A piece of advice, needs more description. CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#68. Posted on June 05, 2007 12:30 PM. geez, not another one... Lame.... Read the advice given to you in the second and first.... Your "newb" time is over. You're now a "noob" A.K.A. Not good. ... Click here to view this comment.

#69. Posted on June 05, 2007 12:30 PM. LOL! That's the second comedy up this week!!! Loved it! Maybe I should write a comedy. hand to hand Vs. Zerg: you're screwed Vs. Protoss: you're screwed Vs. Marine: aim for groin, assume it's man LOL CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#70. Posted on June 05, 2007 12:26 PM. Game mechanics? Has there ever been a game that you've played where a Wraith pummeled a carrier? I like your latest one... a lot. ... Click here to view this comment.

#71. Posted on June 05, 2007 12:13 PM. I'd pay, wait a second, it's coming out in a day or so (hopefully). But will it slow down or in any way, screw up, the server? In other words, will I be able to get onto the site and do stuff or will the server be down? SERVE YOUR MAKER CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#72. Posted on June 04, 2007 06:35 PM. LOL LOL LOL LOL ROTFLOL!!!! sweetness, LOL. who needs real fan fic when we've got dumb *fart* comdedies to keep us amused? SERVE YOUR MAKER CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#73. Posted on June 04, 2007 03:15 PM. YESH! new layout. Whatever's wrong with the current one though? ... Click here to view this comment.

#74. Posted on June 02, 2007 10:24 AM. c'mon Smiffy, submit the next one, too many noob and crap writers invading the site, need someone good to write something. ... Click here to view this comment.

#75. Posted on June 02, 2007 10:22 AM. below average. Reread after a day or two. It was an ok story and good moral, but delivered poorly. I know that I'm not that much better at poetry but I can at least tell a good piece from a poor piece. SERVE YOUR MAKER CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#76. Posted on June 02, 2007 10:18 AM. I agree with X9 %100. Very nice, short, but very nice. Maybe you could do the same for Kerrigan? CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#77. Posted on June 02, 2007 10:15 AM. It was a little confusing at times, maybe needed a little more description, and the flow was broken too much. Nice originality. Good SERVE YOUR MAKER CLONE 98 PS. I don't have time to write a full review so the above's just a stub ... Click here to view this comment.

#78. Posted on June 02, 2007 10:03 AM. Very, very good. But you really need to work on the flow. Sometimes you use dry description, too little description, etc which really slows down the story. You might also want to work on paragraphs instead of many small lines. But like I said, very, very good. Exceptional SERVE YOUR MAKER CLONE 98 BTW, just be careful to make sure it stays realistic in your next installment, it's bordering on the line as is. ... Click here to view this comment.

#79. Posted on June 02, 2007 09:54 AM. LOL, finally an author who can write in first person well. Nice job man. Exceptional but work on description and flow if you want a truly drop-dead story. SERVE YOUR MAKER CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#80. Posted on May 28, 2007 08:39 AM. LOL, awesomeness. ... Click here to view this comment.

#81. Posted on May 28, 2007 08:37 AM. If you want a good source of information you should visit the starcraft wikia. Very useful if you need information for your stories. ... Click here to view this comment.

#82. Posted on May 26, 2007 10:48 AM. evil crapping bunnies. they swarmed the unconscious survivors, tying them to sticks and carrying them away to their strange and twisted rites. Clone 98 woke suspended right above a fire, "This is not happening. I knew that I shouldn't have gone to that Zerg bar, who knows what they put in that drink?" Then the rite started. A bunch of bunnies approached the fire, rear-end first, and... farted... the fart exploded sending fire up at Clone and cooking him. "OK, ... Click here to view this comment.

#83. Posted on May 22, 2007 02:21 PM. Clone 98 had an idea. *pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop* *pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop* *pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop* *pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop* *pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop* *pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop**pop* *pop**pop**pop**pop** And a trillion cloned dollars app ... Click here to view this comment.

#84. Posted on May 22, 2007 02:06 PM. LOL, sup SS? No BFG's? disappointing. I guess Good, might reread later. Nice description. The only reason it wasn't exp, was that it's Doom. Not sc serve your maker CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#85. Posted on May 22, 2007 01:54 PM. does anyone know how to take this off the site? ... Click here to view this comment.

#86. Posted on May 22, 2007 01:53 PM. Read my other works to kno more. Serve your creator Obey your master Understand your allegiance Live for the Horde CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#87. Posted on May 22, 2007 01:51 PM. As long as the server isn't down for longer than a week then I'm fine. It'll be interesting to see the amount of people who stream in here before and after the SC2 release... serve your maker CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#88. Posted on May 21, 2007 03:09 PM. *WOOT* *WOOT*!!! I remember a certain conversation I had with a friend recently, "You know what would be cool? It's like, SC2 comes out and suddenly people flock to sc.org and we're like, veterans, so all the noobs look up to us." And so far, the prediction has every possibility of becoming truth. STARCRAFT 2!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1 serve your maker CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#89. Posted on May 21, 2007 01:52 PM. Niceness. It was easily exceptional, you had just the right mix of everything, adrenaline, action, intrigue. But there was a huge problem. A wraith, taking on an arbiter, a bunch of scouts, a carrier, and a bunch of shuttles? What are you smoking? God powers or what??? I dunno. It just seemed kind of weird, a small little ship taking on a carrier, the size difference is insane, it's like the difference between an ant and an elephant. But besides that, it was pretty freaking awesome. serve you ... Click here to view this comment.

#90. Posted on May 21, 2007 01:28 PM. dang, you're right, it sucks... ... Click here to view this comment.

#91. Posted on May 21, 2007 01:27 PM. I kno, like I said, I just did this in my Keyboarding class. I'm not even going to tell the story from this guy's point of view, just wondering if people would like this new writing style and take it from there. Thanks for voting. ... Click here to view this comment.

#92. Posted on May 16, 2007 12:22 PM. no, it's not dead. Not yet. Then clone 98 and his trillions of clones stepped in, warping in from PFR 8. This PFR will NOT!!!! die. And with his veritable army, he kept it alive. ... Click here to view this comment.

#93. Posted on May 16, 2007 12:20 PM. But then Clone made a fatal mistake, he cloned SS 123452346347456745234 Oh whatever. A LOT, of times (Along with SS's BFG, Big Friendly Gun) and gave control to SS. The problem with this is that SS and his army of his cloned self fired one round of bfg's, and the universe exploded from the heat generated (no, not spontaneously, i'm not breaking any rules) So, now they are IN hell, along with the demons, SS's clones, and a ton of BFG's. In the portal that they had made from the real-worl ... Click here to view this comment.

#94. Posted on May 14, 2007 02:16 PM. whatever, I'm just saying, you have your beliefs I have mine, I'm not going to fight over them in this childish manner. It was a nice story that I liked, but at points disagreed with, it's ok to disagree with something and still read it and like it. It's sort of like if someone detests reading and is forced to read a book. He enjoys the book, but he didn't like reading it. I dunno. Whatever. ... Click here to view this comment.

#95. Posted on May 14, 2007 02:13 PM. umm, stupid... Thats against the rules, - Avoid godmodding (i.e. “The universe spontaneously combusted for no apparent reason.”) That includes avoiding killing off other peoples’ characters. ... Click here to view this comment.

#96. Posted on May 13, 2007 10:23 AM. But he had made a mistake in exploding the cross-shaped ship because just at that moment the ancient frost giant farted, which exploded due to the fire, igniting all the zombies in a fiery inferno, and duh, all Zombies are pwned by fire. SS stood alone against clone. "Fine, I don't have an army, and you don't have an army, let's settle this!" *POP* *POP**POP**POP**POP**POP**POP**POP**POP**POP**POP**POP* *POP**POP**POP**POP**POP**POP**POP**POP**POP**POP**POP**POP* *POP**POP** ... Click here to view this comment.

#97. Posted on May 13, 2007 10:01 AM. Profetofchaos, just give up, deadlyassassin has you beat on every front. Just accept the criticism and use it to help you write your next story. ... Click here to view this comment.

#98. Posted on May 12, 2007 02:14 PM. Jeez, the fact that some people hide behind their internet anonymity in this manner is incredibly stupid. 1. I'm a christian, I read the story, didn't like that it was christians who were dying, but thought "Hey, it's fiction, whatever." 2. I think that IhateZerg should not have tackled religion. Too hot an issue to handle at the current moment, but again. "IT'S FICTION! NOT REAL LIFE POLITICS." 3. Although I totally disagree with atheists and wish that they would k ... Click here to view this comment.

#99. Posted on May 12, 2007 01:59 PM. The clones rallied to the pizza hut battlecruiser. "Uh oh." the captain thought to himself, he definitely didn't have that many pizzas. So he fled, going into hyperspace being tailed by trillions of clones. Who pursued. Following the battlecruiser to the *hem* rear end of the ancient Norse Frost Giant Ymir. They had cornered the battlecruiser but had run into a bigger problem. The ancient Norse Frost Giant Ymir was about to pass gass. (OT: Duh I'll always have my army, ... Click here to view this comment.

#100. Posted on May 12, 2007 01:54 PM. *WOOT* *WOOT* And no, I've never heard you comment about your sister before this story, she must be a talented writer, does she frequent this site? CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#101. Posted on May 10, 2007 03:19 PM. wow, finally I see starcraftChamp on sc.org again. Where U ben? ... Click here to view this comment.

#102. Posted on May 10, 2007 03:04 PM. what are you talking about? I and StarcraftChamp decided to scrap this chapter and the first one was good. Our next one isn't coming out probably for another three months. ... Click here to view this comment.

#103. Posted on May 10, 2007 03:02 PM. what's goin on? crapfest, arguing in the ranks! horrific, we're off to a good start gentlemen. So then clone (who had unlimited troops at his disposal) decided for no good reason to take over the universe. And he did... Until he reached the last planet in the universe which was occupied by zombies, a Samurai with fresh paint on his smelly armor, and a particularly pissed off Haladras (whatever the heck that is). That's when the fun began... ... Click here to view this comment.

#104. Posted on May 10, 2007 02:56 PM. good point. So you liked it, sort of? I'm trying to write another story right now but school is getting in the way... So anfreakingnoying CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#105. Posted on May 07, 2007 07:19 PM. And the Clones decided to use his rusting armored body as... A crap bucket... For the 400 years it took SS to wake up. "Ugh, what happened, all I can remember is having all my minions getting killed and getting knocked out, where's my armor?" Puts on armor. "Ahh, that's better, strange though, why does it smell so bad all the sudden, and what's this squishy stuff in my armor?" ... Click here to view this comment.

#106. Posted on May 05, 2007 03:19 PM. LOL, I know it's stupid but reading your reviews make me laugh at how everyone else likes my stories but you (no offence intended), do you honestly think this was average? Because if you do, then maybe it's time that I started writing better. 'nyways, your remarks are noted. CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#107. Posted on May 05, 2007 03:04 PM. Then Ashton Kutcher walked in. Clone (who had tapped Geckat's phone lines) slapped his head at the utter truth of the statement. Then randomly (Time for a plot guys) all the people in the world were teleported to an intergalactic arena, the contest being who could crap the fastest, longest, and the most, in thirty seconds... Let the crappage begin! ... Click here to view this comment.

#108. Posted on May 04, 2007 03:47 PM. make it longer, pretty funny though. ORCS RULE!!!! OKIE DOKIE. CLONED ORC 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#109. Posted on May 04, 2007 03:45 PM. thanx. ... Click here to view this comment.

#110. Posted on May 04, 2007 03:44 PM. u SUCK AtomicKitten. Nice story, it's supposed to be humor, right??? Right??? But anyways, it was humorous, but not really that good, make it longer. CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#111. Posted on May 04, 2007 03:31 PM. Horrifically amazingly incredible. You didn't put a lot of heavy detail into it because you really didn't have to, the dialogue swept the story. Indeed, it was a freaking sweet twist, but there was one (and only one, and a microscopic thing at that) error that it COULD be said you did wrong, not tying it in to Starcraft well enough. Pretty much the only mention to Starcraft which makes it distinctly starcraft and not our world is the mention of ghosts, you might want to vamp it up a little so th ... Click here to view this comment.

#112. Posted on May 01, 2007 05:00 PM. he started running, and also like a startled police officer, he was overweight (I actually have a high respect of the Police Force, but c'mon, you're cops for crying out loud, lay off the twinkies and doughnuts or I'm just gonna call it what it is, a fat cop) and couldn't run very fast, resulting in the... *pauses, thinking hard and deep* "Ouch, too much thinking, hurting my brain." THING. (tada!) to catch up with him quickly, reducing SS to a smoldering, slobbering wreck. ... Click here to view this comment.

#113. Posted on May 01, 2007 04:41 PM. Do I have something to say?! Of course I do... nanernaner deedee, you wrote a better story than me but mine is on pop fiction! Seriously though, yours was better written. CLONE 98 (BTW, this has nothing really to do with your story, just felt like writing something.) ... Click here to view this comment.

#114. Posted on April 30, 2007 05:55 PM. which by now was very smelly from his constant habituation and his recent urge to crap non-stop. (I'm assuming that that the 'splat' was the drones?) the drones and the hatchery reached the meteorite in 5.6 seconds due to a massive, exploded fart... They soon started building a colony and soon had infested all the tarsonain idol wannabees. A job well done, thought Geckat to himself, mentally patting himself on the back... Then the infested terrans started singing which was even worse b ... Click here to view this comment.

#115. Posted on April 29, 2007 03:39 PM. Then clone had a brain wave. He sent cloned a large, very dense, meteorite into the planet's orbit. The meteorite attracted all the flying machines and humans with it's high gravity profile and stuck them to it's surface like glue, leaving them stranded in orbit. Then they realized that they could still have their tarsonis idol on the meteorite. Clone 98 smacked his forehead as the vile singing continued from the chunk of rock orbiting the planet. (LOL, that's the point of Popcorn Fan Fict ... Click here to view this comment.

#116. Posted on April 28, 2007 09:24 AM. I wouldn't know... Clone and Grey Ghost were torn. Should they attempt to stop either the horrible singing of first Gay (or as he is more commonly known) Geckat, or Mengsk... finally Clone had had enough, "I CAN'T TAKE IT ANYMORE!!!" He cloned himself once and Grey Ghost once and told his duplicate to take Grey Ghost's duplicate to go take out Mengsk while he and Grey Ghost eliminated Geckat. The clones started out while Clone and Grey Ghost came upon another obstacle, how could ... Click here to view this comment.

#117. Posted on April 28, 2007 06:15 AM. Clone knew he had a problem... Gay *cough* I mean, Geckat-like psychopaths always scared him... So as soon as he heard the news he went... ... Click here to view this comment.

#118. Posted on April 27, 2007 12:26 PM. Then Clone 98 did something totally out of the ordinary and probably will never do so again... (tense moment) He cloned himself a 2904358732409583274059238573029 times. (whew, big surprise) Then he cloned an Ak-47000 2904358732409583274059238573029 and one times (one for himself. Dur). The war was on... But luckily for all present GreyGhost's CR-20 came with an emergency 'if you encounter demons led by a drunken samurai mode' (sorry if this counts for a weird rifle, sort of like ... Click here to view this comment.

#119. Posted on April 27, 2007 12:18 PM. Nice... But not SC, related.... My gosh, they really should set up a poll on their official website, "Which game would you most like to see come out with a sequel?" The most likely results as follows. Warcraft: 3% Diablo: 2 1/2% Starcraft: 93% Other: 1 1/2% That would get them started on a sequel for sure. ... Click here to view this comment.

#120. Posted on April 26, 2007 06:15 PM. umm... note to any future posters (mainly you SS), please try to follow things that were meant to be followed (and then he pulled out a...), or at least try to follow the plot a little. Come on Solid Samurai, it was too random and it didn't really follow the plot.... _-__--___---____----____---___--__-_ But unfortunately for the samurai, all the non-zombified clones recognized HIM as trash, therefore banishing him, along with all the zombies to the underworld. Solid Samurai gulped as he lo ... Click here to view this comment.

#121. Posted on April 26, 2007 03:36 PM. 2 true, where did everybody go? Too afraid of crap?! Come on, be men, we are the race that invented ball wipes for crying out loud (to anyone who doesn't know what that means, you probably don't want 2 know, and if you really do, get your older brother or a high school-age kid to show you...) _-__-_--_-_--_-__- spontaneously erupted in a "poof" of smoke. All the C.R.A.P weirdo's from Britain went wild. "Where the bloody hell did he bloody well bloody go, bloody?!" Wh ... Click here to view this comment.

#122. Posted on April 25, 2007 06:50 PM. Ah, I won't vote but this strategy really doesn't look like it will work. Too many Reavers, that's a freaking lot of 'sources. punching a hole in their air defense with air units?! umm... that's why it's called air defense, to keep out the air units... Just doesn't seem like it would work but if it did, nice strat. ... Click here to view this comment.

#123. Posted on April 25, 2007 06:44 PM. But that's just the point. It is the first chapter. The first chapter is when you introduce everyone, show the reader what they're doing, why they do it, some background. The first chapter is where you get people hooked, the other ones run on adrenaline and guts. If this was a sequel and you already knew the people and what they were doing and talking about then it would be fine, but as a first chapter doing something like this probably won't fly. sorry but that's just the way it seems to me. St ... Click here to view this comment.

#124. Posted on April 25, 2007 06:40 PM. nice man, but your sister?! I know, I know, it shouldn't matter, but it just sounds weird, you know? I know that most times girls are better than us at writing and intellectual stuff but it just sounds funny when you put it *Well i'm gonna get my sister to read that scene and wher eit transitions over into chapter 15 and see what she thinks* no offense intended. You should check out the popcorn fan fiction, dude you would like it. ... Click here to view this comment.

#125. Posted on April 25, 2007 06:33 PM. a large pile of dung. The clones and humans banded together, determined that if they were going to fall they would fall together. Clone 98's quantahelions of clones were ready, giving off a war cheer that shook the ground. The GreyGhost readied his uber c-10 rifle, turning it into "Deep fat, fry" mode, A.K.A. RPG/bazooka/heavy demolition rifle/ultimate massacre weapon, StarcraftChamp pulled out his controller, taking control of a cloned SCV who made a barracks that pumped out a stea ... Click here to view this comment.

#126. Posted on April 24, 2007 02:49 PM. Unfortunately for him and fortunately for the rest of the world, BSTrhino went to Starbuck's cafe where he had to wait an eternity to get his highly ovverrated and overpriced coffee and then spend another eternity finding a seat among all the wi-fi obsessed Nintend Ds controlled freaks........ Several eternities later (yup, BSTrhino took yet another eternity to drink his coffee) BSTRhino showed up, riled up, fired up, f****ng ready to go. And realized... ... Click here to view this comment.

#127. Posted on April 23, 2007 05:23 PM. lol, I love overly salty retarded redundant popcorn... *sigh* Meant to be savored in large quantities of dumbness. but 'nyways, where is the story right now? It seems to me that everyone is on Tarsonis crapping?! Sweetness. Geckat walked over to the Grey Ghost *plop* "Umm" *plop* "How do we get ourselves to stop." *plop* "pooping spontaneously?" *plop* "Well." *plop* As you can probably tell, there was a huge pile of cra ... Click here to view this comment.

#128. Posted on April 23, 2007 05:15 PM. Nice story, just a little too short. Nice opening paragraph, sweet description. Just one thing though, that prevented me from voting exceptional, you need to clarify some more points starting with the fact that Zeke was his pet, I was expecting it to end up being a drugged Zergling that they were messing with or something for an experiment. And also, it doesn't describe what his job is, what they're there for, and what the Hydralisk is 'late' for. It just is sort of hard to read. Nice though, am ... Click here to view this comment.

#129. Posted on April 23, 2007 05:12 PM. I really liked it, for once not a novel with war and blood shed the main point. I guess that it was a backdrop for better things to come after all, but it could have been used to show how the Zerg weren't only butchers, they were also animals. Dunno, seemed like a good point. ~Exceptional~ CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#130. Posted on April 23, 2007 05:05 PM. I know, it's readable. I just wasn't sure if it was an actual mistake or just how you yourself spell it. ... Click here to view this comment.

#131. Posted on April 23, 2007 05:03 PM. no prob, the least I could do for a fellow critic. lol. Thanks for clarifying because when you put it that way it's a lot easier to understand everything. ... Click here to view this comment.

#132. Posted on April 23, 2007 05:01 PM. lol, but 'nyways. I think Jackson is awesome because he's sort of like Chuck Norris. Maybe talented, but truly lucky, heck, Jackson could take on the whole Protoss force blind folded and win, he'd probably accidentally set off the temples. But good point, Smiffy, you do write Zerg incredibly well. An idea would be to write a story from a Zerg perspective on how the Zerg take over Earth and the whole campaign involved. Like, Kerrigan figured out where Earth was by checking the nav coordinates of ... Click here to view this comment.

#133. Posted on April 22, 2007 04:58 PM. actually I didn't even remember that it was you who commented so harshly on my other story at all. No revenge implied. I was somewhat surprised when you voted average. But after looking over my story I was like, "And how did this make pop fiction?" But right now (literally) I'm working on another story so look out. BTW, but he spent the night in a bar. Shouldn't he have had to report to his barracks at least? Just seemed strange. ... Click here to view this comment.

#134. Posted on April 22, 2007 04:55 PM. farted again. Then a firebat stepped into the room, and upon recognizing clone 98 as an enemy he fired his jets igniting the gas emnating from the ghost's posterior and causing a huge eruption. ... Click here to view this comment.

#135. Posted on April 22, 2007 09:50 AM. I agree with all said so far. Too short, some grammar problems and some flaws. This should be the beginning to a much larger story, not a story in itself. ... Click here to view this comment.

#136. Posted on April 22, 2007 09:47 AM. Crazy awesome man. Just incredible. You might have taken a hiatus but you're about as rusty as a stainless steel sword. Definitely waiting for the sequel. Just one thing that you might want to look out for. When you included the paragraph about the little girl who scraped her knee. I thought that that was his childhood. You might want to more clearly define point of view changes. ~Exceptional~ CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#137. Posted on April 22, 2007 09:38 AM. I really liked it. I thought that although it wasn't the point, you do SWAT-style stories pretty well. I think that you should have researched christians a little bit more though. Yes, they would die for their religion, but christians would be the last people to start a fight with the law for it. Do you have any clue how many christians have been martyrs over the years and not done anything to protect themselves? I myself really liked the story, but next time I wouldn't tackle religion, touchy s ... Click here to view this comment.

#138. Posted on April 22, 2007 09:31 AM. It was really nicely written and I can tell easily that you are a good author, but this story just really doesn't go anywhere and doesn't make a lot of sense. If he's a soldier, why is he getting drunk, doing drugs, and messing and messing around with hookers? Wouldn't his commanding officer have him court-martialed? He really didn't act like a soldier at all. Especially a soldier in a war zone. I guess that the point of the story was to make a point but I think that it could have been done in a ... Click here to view this comment.

#139. Posted on April 22, 2007 09:18 AM. But it was instantly wiped off as he remembered that his mother was coming to visit today. Aww, man. *fwish* The door opened. "Aww, sweetie pie!!" shouted Haladras' mother as she tried to both hug and Kiss Haladras as hard as she could at the same time, Haladras violently resisting. "Umm, mother, uh, I'm about to have company and now isn't the right time.?" "It's okay bumpkin, mommy won't embarrass you." Unfortunately for Haladras it was too late, ... Click here to view this comment.

#140. Posted on April 22, 2007 09:12 AM. Hey Ecyor0, don't beat yourself up. It was sweet after all. But next time it might be helpful to sample some other kind of music. ... Click here to view this comment.

#141. Posted on April 22, 2007 09:10 AM. nice, crazyoldman's an aussie. What up mate? Sorry for all you non-aussie speakers out there, that just means. What's up man? but 'nyways. BLIZZCON!!!! Good points noted. 100$? Is Blizzard going broke or something? Convention = boring, unless hosted by Blizzard! Best thing that could possibly be hoped for = STARCRAFT 2: THE RISE OF THE CLONES!!! whatever. Looks fun, if you're rich or just have money to spare and live in California. CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#142. Posted on April 22, 2007 09:07 AM. So it just has some better software and works better? Sounds good 2 me. ... Click here to view this comment.

#143. Posted on April 20, 2007 03:05 PM. hey, what, calling Geckat a dog-face offends some people? I was just kidding. Sorry if it offended you Gekcat. ... Click here to view this comment.

#144. Posted on April 20, 2007 03:04 PM. yeah, have to agree. Nicely written, though, but in parts confusing ... Click here to view this comment.

#145. Posted on April 20, 2007 02:55 PM. Definitely your best chapter. Your other ones sort of started to get monotonous because of how long they were but this one you started out fresh and kept it going. Nice job, you're improving. Sweet originality. The only thing that is (slightly) concerning is teea? Telia? whatver. U just have to make sure that you keep it realistic. If you want to add her emotional difficulties, carrying-ons and so forth. All fine and dandy. But just don't forget. She is a cerebrate. Born to be evil. If you mess ... Click here to view this comment.

#146. Posted on April 20, 2007 02:29 PM. Nice, nice cut scenes, but the music didn't seem to fit. Just dun-dun-dun-dun-dun--dun-un didn't seem appropriate with the things blowing up and stuff, just didn't seem, what's it, emotional? Powerful? enough? I dunno. Really good but there's always room for improvement. ... Click here to view this comment.

#147. Posted on April 20, 2007 02:20 PM. FIRST!!! THIS IS MY FIRST FIRST!!! Yeah, yeah, I need a life... This looks fun, but on the other hand, what makes this ladder so much better than other, already existing ladders? ... Click here to view this comment.

#148. Posted on April 19, 2007 06:12 PM. LOL. Saw this several months ago but the humor took a while to sink in. So funny. Marines are retarded. Sweet pic. ... Click here to view this comment.

#149. Posted on April 19, 2007 06:11 PM. Seriously sick, but just one thing to note, however. Shouldn't it be bigger? And isn't it a little low? Looks like it's going to land or crash. ... Click here to view this comment.

#150. Posted on April 18, 2007 06:50 PM. good point, I like that 2. It WASN'T just about how Kerrigan is dying, it's trying to prove a point. Cookie points! ... Click here to view this comment.

#151. Posted on April 18, 2007 06:47 PM. *sigh*... come on... *pulls out Tipman 98* "U are gonna pay for wrecking my awesome lead-on. *shoots Deadfast through cyberspace while Deadfast is lookin at *hem* "pictures". Deadfast swallowed the paintball, messing up his internal organs and turning them a disgusting shade of orange. "You (censored: yup, more verbal abuse). U'd better take that back right now!" But Clone98, who was busy laughing with all of his clone friends. "Yup, I've heard of yellow-bell ... Click here to view this comment.

#152. Posted on April 17, 2007 04:08 PM. wow, random. But nicely done nonetheless. The non-clones were outnumbered 23495320459823405983 to 2, Geckat and Haladras who were slowly being pushed back into their starting bunker. They were down to their last resort... Geckat looked over at Haladras, paintballs flying over his head and nodded, haladras nodded back... It was time for, the... (whoever comments next, make it something big, cool, freaking sweet, but seriously dumb at the same time, and if they don't I will get out my OW ... Click here to view this comment.

#153. Posted on April 16, 2007 01:09 PM. what? Didn't understand the last paragraph. ... Click here to view this comment.

#154. Posted on April 16, 2007 01:06 PM. Allright. I have to agree with everything that Rye had to say, however. Get the grammar and punctuation fixed up, shorten unnecessary words, and perhaps give some more background to Bard? Right now he seems like a rock with a bad temper. ;-] But I also think that this has potential. Keep working on it! CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#155. Posted on April 16, 2007 01:03 PM. Umm. CrackersL, I was just commenting on this story itself, I don't think that I said anything about newbies having the ability to get better. I actually think that this guy has some potential, he just needs to figure out how to use it. ... Click here to view this comment.

#156. Posted on April 16, 2007 12:52 PM. anywhere you want to be, currently it's looking a little retarded, said clone #224567544676454665578564667. Then Clone realized that he had made a mistake, his clone shouldn't be able to think any individual thoughts that he wasn't thinking. He turned to his clone... ... Click here to view this comment.

#157. Posted on April 15, 2007 02:43 PM. Man... I just read that post and I realized that that was seriously retarded. If the next commentator doesn't want to use that, you don't have to. ... Click here to view this comment.

#158. Posted on April 15, 2007 09:47 AM. Just write the darned thing Haladras. I do believe that you have most of Sc.org supporting you. ... Click here to view this comment.

#159. Posted on April 15, 2007 09:44 AM. Apparently it was indeed for "personal" use... If your sister forcing you to was considered personal. Indeed after bringing StarcraftChamp's balls back to life he instantaneously teleported Champ to his sister's house where she was awaiting him eagerly... ... Click here to view this comment.

#160. Posted on April 14, 2007 06:05 AM. LOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOL Starcraftchamp! POTC ROCKS! In the meantime, having become friends in their drunken stupor, Geckat, StarcraftChamp, and Clone98 were fast becoming friends, and at the present moment they were playing a game of paintball. Clone 98 was on his own team (seeing as how he had several clones to play with), verses Geckat, and StarcraftChamp. Geckat was providing the cover fire while StarcraftChamp crept up slowly, trying to take the clones by surprise. Just as he was about ... Click here to view this comment.

#161. Posted on April 13, 2007 07:26 PM. And a passing bird pooped on him splattering white crap all over his already ugly face, actually making it prettier. (Sorry, Hal, couldn't resist) Unfortunately for the clones, the crap only woke up Haladras who started yelling at his troops, using the bird s*** as inspiration. "Look to what levels those nincompoops would drop, to the point that they would even crap on ME!!!" ... Click here to view this comment.

#162. Posted on April 13, 2007 03:30 PM. But not for long... The problem with trying to kill the original person if he has cloned himself 98,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000 ,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000 times is that you can never tell if you have killed him... Or a clone of him. The aforementioned "veteran" had only injured another clone, and only minorly, at that. Clone 98 quickly leapt into the fray, exiting his Titan 4500 command vehicle so big that it could fit 45 seige tanks ... Click here to view this comment.

#163. Posted on April 10, 2007 04:15 PM. The only thing that I can really say about your comment was that while, yeah, he held in his rage, don't marines have anger inhibitors that prevent them from destroying things? Not to mention that if he blew something up it would have attracted unwanted attention. And. He already knew that he was gonna blow up the research facility so he would, in fact, be indirectly be killing everyone responsible. Jak was only looking at the marine to make sure that he wasn't getting up again, he made the m ... Click here to view this comment.

#164. Posted on April 10, 2007 04:09 PM. Umm.. SgtHK, although it might be in the poetry department, it's also in the fiction department which is where I saw it so I was just curious. ... Click here to view this comment.

#165. Posted on April 10, 2007 04:07 PM. sheesh, might as well drop it now... Get Torrasque to make a post about it and release the new one the same day. Please. Just don't ruin the popcorn fan fiction for the newbies. CLONE 98 A CLONE WITH NINETY SEVEN BROTHERS AND SISTERS ... Click here to view this comment.

#166. Posted on April 10, 2007 04:04 PM. Just curious, what DID make you start writing a series about deaths in StarCraft? Just something a little different? If you really want to make a good one though, you should probably do one on Jim Raynor, not only would everyone read it, but the controversy would spiral into a cosmic crisis. Just some thoughts ... Click here to view this comment.

#167. Posted on April 10, 2007 03:59 PM. finally the web site is back on!!! I was gettin some major withdrawal symptoms *starts shaking* I seriously have no life. 'nyways, the diablo thing looks interesting. ... Click here to view this comment.

#168. Posted on April 02, 2007 04:14 PM. Geez, AtomicKitten, can you draw better than that? Could you stop being so critical of other people's work, just take an optimistic view, not pessimistic. 'nyways, the artwork. Sweet, but strange. Good drawing, but the question is. Of what? I know that Tyrranids are a race from Warhammer 40,000 or something but the pictures that I've seen of them have nothing in common with your picture. Exceptional though CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#169. Posted on April 02, 2007 04:07 PM. He had a quick debate with himself if there were enough beggar's in the city... He decided that they did so he picked up the wretch stained person and chucked him out of the city limits. Then the beggar pulled off his hood revealing the face of... CLONE 98 "The heck was that for man! Haven't you ever had a hangover before!" Raynor gulped, he had just disturbed one of the forces of the universe, and sure enough he turned around to find a clone of himself facing him... ... Click here to view this comment.

#170. Posted on April 02, 2007 04:03 PM. Batchelor, I don't have a problem with a little cussing on the side in a story, and I realize that lots of it is for realism, but that particular bit by the drill sergeant sort of disturbed me... Just really didn't seem necessary... I dunno, nice story, should make pop fic list. CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#171. Posted on April 02, 2007 03:57 PM. WOW, really sweet. There really wasn't anything to say was wrong about it except perhaps explaining the bit in the end might have been a mistake. Just curious, does anyone else see the strangeness in a series written about people dying? Just seems really sad to me. definitely exceptional, although a little strange, want to read some of your other works now. CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#172. Posted on April 02, 2007 03:33 PM. ok, I'll trust you... Not that I have much of a choice, you are, after all, my moderator... BTW, be on the look out for a new series written by yours truly. CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#173. Posted on April 01, 2007 02:46 PM. It's a mod for WC for SC. What I mean is, that it's a mod for WC, but done in the SC universe. ... Click here to view this comment.

#174. Posted on April 01, 2007 10:23 AM. LOL, this comic strip is so funny. Apparently it doesn't have to be hand-drawn to be a good one. CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#175. Posted on April 01, 2007 10:14 AM. lol that is so funny... Umm... Harbinger aren't you supposed to be a section moderator? Why are you contributing to the cussing? ... Click here to view this comment.

#176. Posted on April 01, 2007 10:12 AM. holy shiz sweet!!! ... Click here to view this comment.

#177. Posted on April 01, 2007 10:11 AM. Freaking sweet man! ... Click here to view this comment.

#178. Posted on April 01, 2007 10:09 AM. Holy crap this looks sweet... Hope he doesn't quit for whatever reason... Hey Haladras, I did ask to join Sons of War, you guys just haven't told me what yet ;-) CLONE 98 P.S. How do you guys do those smilies??? ... Click here to view this comment.

#179. Posted on March 31, 2007 12:13 PM. lol, pretty funny! ... Click here to view this comment.

#180. Posted on March 31, 2007 11:57 AM. huh, you might have fixed the drone line, but it's still up. Glad it gives you some ideas but if you do write a short story around it just make sure that the poem isn't the main attraction, otherwise it would be like resubmitting it while adding a little to it to gain attention. Liked some of your other stuff though, pretty funny. CLONE 98 Guess I might as well vote good. ... Click here to view this comment.

#181. Posted on March 31, 2007 11:55 AM. funny... ... Click here to view this comment.

#182. Posted on March 31, 2007 11:52 AM. Nice. I though it woulda been a nuke that some ghost fires... ... Click here to view this comment.

#183. Posted on March 31, 2007 11:49 AM. nice, but is there an actual method to figure it out? ... Click here to view this comment.

#184. Posted on March 30, 2007 03:40 PM. LOL, nice... Incredible ending, yes anti-climatic, but it works nicely... ... Click here to view this comment.

#185. Posted on March 30, 2007 03:36 PM. Plot twist, holy crappage.... Nicely done too, right at the end of the story that makes it all tense and crap and sets up your next story, you can not read this story and NOT read the next one... Very nicely done... Lesse.. Good description, exceptional Wraith chatter... You made the Directorate marines realistic.... All around EXCEPTIONALx20... Next time, please don't take so long to write a sequel... CLONE 98 One more thing, too much cursing, it really detracts from the writing, 'sall ... Click here to view this comment.

#186. Posted on March 30, 2007 03:19 PM. *sigh* stop worrying, it really doesn't matter if if sounds Asimovey... My writing sounds like a sort of blend of every book I've ever read but that doesn't make it clique. You CAN be influenced by someone without making it clique... Just write the sequel and stop worrying about: 1. Copying off of someone elses idead 2. If people will like it or not 3. If it's actually accurate (it is "fiction" after all, and it's not like anything that us authors write is official). plez w ... Click here to view this comment.

#187. Posted on March 29, 2007 06:34 PM. Yo watch it ValValiant4... Keep your perverted thoughts OFF the site. ... Click here to view this comment.

#188. Posted on March 29, 2007 06:31 PM. Umm. Haladras, you should check out http://starcraft.wikia.com/wiki/Main_Page and read up about the Xel'Naga. They actually DID fall incredibly quickly to the Zerg. For being the "ultimate" form of evolution they very easily overlooked the Zerg violent and conquering tendencies... Just curious, who actually cares if it sounds like Asimov? He's pretty awesome. CLONE 98 And yes, write a sequel or I'll never respect your moderator authority again... ... Click here to view this comment.

#189. Posted on March 29, 2007 06:23 PM. sheesh guys, what does it matter who put the darned thing out... If it bothers you that much just battle it out on Battle.net or gosugamers for the rights... Sheesh... But yeah, it was Geckat's idea so if he wants you to take it back, Haladras, you should... Now, without further ado... Latorneau looked around stealthily to make sure no one was looking and he pulled out a pair of super cool secret agent sunglasses to hide his real identity and he went karate on the zerg, kicking and spittin ... Click here to view this comment.

#190. Posted on March 29, 2007 06:19 PM. Holy crap short... But sweet. Actually shouldn't this be in the poetry and humor department??? Lessee. Nice anology, it's a zealot or templar or something. Nice flow but the drones part was a bit awkward. This would make a good poem if there was some sort of story behind it, sort of like a short battle and a squad of clean up marines find this written on a block of stone... I dunno, like I said it was short but good, shoulda been in the poetry department. I'm not really a poetry critic though ... Click here to view this comment.

#191. Posted on March 29, 2007 03:45 PM. Yeah, really, really awkward with random words thrown in at random times. Give your egg back to the hen? The heck. It's just too random... But on the other hand, it did sound sort of like Dr. Suess. Whatever, nice effort... CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#192. Posted on March 29, 2007 03:40 PM. college Smiffy? In college don't you live on campus? Or do you mean pack up and leave for college? ... Click here to view this comment.

#193. Posted on March 27, 2007 06:43 PM. knock knock!!! Haladras, this thing is rated exceptional, it looks like everyone who's read it wants to see more, WRITE A FREAKING SEQUEL OR YOU WILL HAVE A RIOT ON YOUR HANDS!!! CLONE 98 and if you don't have a riot of HUMANs on your hands, you will have 8468485484646749846416174321731859768519371965716891763891763891673 clone riot (whatever number that is) WRITE A SEQWEL!! ... Click here to view this comment.

#194. Posted on March 27, 2007 06:29 PM. can't believe you two old guys (to the site) can't remember the good old popcorn fan ficcie days... The story is in the commentator's hands whatever they choose to make of it... It was a dark and stormy night. The marine paced restlessly around the bunker, nervously looking out into the fog-enshrouded darkness... What was that? First one, then two, then a billion clones slowly appeared, walking, towards the bunker all holding what appeared to be... ... Click here to view this comment.

#195. Posted on March 27, 2007 06:25 PM. FREAKING AWESOMENESS!!! TORRASQUE, you're awesome! But yeah, if she gets it right, awesome... If she screws it up... Dang.. CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#196. Posted on March 26, 2007 05:48 PM. WOW, really nice man... Truly original and delivered with a Saw-like grace (although I've never actually seen any of the series I assume that this is sort of what it would be like). You really mastered the interrogation. Yeah, there were some bits you slipped on (the general's attitude, certain typos, certain missplaced or missing words). But no major biggie. ~Exceptional~ CLONE 98 ... Click here to view this comment.

#197. Posted on March 26, 2007 05:36 PM. Good job, pop fan fic list... ... Click here to view this comment.

#198. Posted on March 26, 2007 05:34 PM. I'm not really an expert, but either change the way they talk. "GRENADE!" The marine screamed at the bouncing, black, projectile. OR. To not mention how they talk at all. "How you doin?" Replied Jack casually. "Doin allright." The medic responded. "That's nice." Just a few thoughts... ... Click here to view this comment.

#199. Posted on March 26, 2007 05:30 PM. Ummm... Too much like the game. Wwwaaayyy too much. In real life, unless you have human personnel available how would you just "Build up an attack force of 24 marines"? Unless you can put a magical seed in water that will grow into a human in three minutes, not happening. Why do you have to explain everything too? Of course the cerebrate would know that Mutas are fast... And so would we... The Marines and Medics always own Mutalisks line was just wierd, he's not in an actual convers ... Click here to view this comment.

#200. Posted on March 26, 2007 05:20 PM. what the heck? My comment posted twice with one difference. ... Click