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The following are documents submitted by this user:

#	Document	Channel
1	Confessions of a Soldier	Fiction
2	Final Letter Home [DarkFury]	Fiction
3	Infested Man	Fiction
4	Infested Man (Reprise)	Fiction
5	Infested Man: II	Fiction
6	Infested Man: III	Fiction
7	Infested Man: IV	Fiction
8	Infested Man: Prologue	Fiction
9	Infested Man: V	Fiction
10	Infested Man: VI	Fiction
11	Jimmy Raynor	Fiction
12	Jimmy Raynor - First Installment	Fiction
13	Jimmy Raynor: Chapter II	Fiction
14	Life of a Deceased	Fiction
15	Project Shadowblade [DoctorOctopus]	Fiction
16	Silent Fate: Chapter I	Fiction
17	Silent Fate: Chapter II	Fiction
18	Silent Fate: Chapter III	Fiction
19	Silent Fate: Chapter IV	Fiction
20	Silent Fate: Chapter V	Fiction
21	Silent Fate: Chapter VI	Fiction
22	Silent Fate: Chapter VII	Fiction

The following are comments posted by this user:

#1. Posted on June 23, 2008 04:58 PM. Dear Onelonemarine, Truth be told, I don't know why people hype more over Maelstrom since this is one helluva series to compete with it. Personally, I like this series more. You have a knack for writing that I just can't seem to explain. Furthermore, your ideas are extremely original. Personally, i hate the typical Zerg-terran all out brawl, which is kind of tedious, and its wonderful to see a new Starcraft rendition. There are no grammatical errors, and I have yet to spot a conceptual flaw. ... Click here to view this comment.

#2. Posted on June 19, 2008 05:14 PM. Candi...sounds like a porn star's name. Anyways, I understand your frustration for comments, so I'll get to this piece asap. Looks promising. ... Click here to view this comment.

#3. Posted on June 19, 2008 08:04 AM. Wow, no comments for almost a month. That's sort of disconcerting. Nevertheless, I have been furious at work, and the second part is thirty pages long (i'll think about cutting it down.). It'll be out shortly. ... Click here to view this comment.

#4. Posted on June 03, 2008 04:15 PM. Perhaps I should clarify: The soldiers must be on the ground in order to prevent the Zerg brood from diverging before the bomb goes off. Perhaps I should be more clear about that. Also, the reason I glossed over things is that this is just a prologue, of the sort, and I'm going to introduce my main characters in the next part. Thanks for the advice, nonetheless. ... Click here to view this comment.

#5. Posted on May 29, 2008 07:31 PM. I just re-read some of it, and realized there's a bit of it cut off where Captain Arkov and Colonel Sanders are talking. I'm going to have to paste it in and then edit it as soon as possible. Thanks for the comments, though. ... Click here to view this comment.

#6. Posted on May 29, 2008 05:39 PM. I've decided that you're my favorite author. You're writing is certainly very, very high-quality. A thousand awesome's. ... Click here to view this comment.

#7. Posted on May 29, 2008 03:00 PM. Stupidest fucking thing I've ever heard. Would you party if you found out your loved one might be dead, but not quite? ... Click here to view this comment.

#8. Posted on May 25, 2008 08:02 PM. Well, my new one's out. ... Click here to view this comment.

#9. Posted on May 25, 2008 11:09 AM. Riveting, to say the least. It was a very nice chapter to the entire series. I really liked how you played out the contamination and the infestation. Alot of other people I see trying to write infested Terran stories usually end up really badly but this one was very nice. I also love how the characters are now forced to contend with - not one, but two different oppositions: the enemy fleet as well as themselves. One question: what do you mean when the virus was airbourne? I wasn't really sure. I ... Click here to view this comment.

#10. Posted on May 18, 2008 09:50 PM. Bad grammar and choppy sentences ruin the story. So many flawed ideas kill the story and make it worthless. I'll give you one stupid idea: The guy's girlfriend almost dies and he is throwing a party? The general wouldn't write individual letters to low-ranking officers and field nurses. Windows Media Player exists only in the twenty-first century Earth. ... Click here to view this comment.

#11. Posted on April 30, 2008 07:55 PM. Very nice. I thought this installment complemented the entire series rather nicely. I thought the flow was good, and the character development and all the other necessary components of the story. I only have two beefs: One would be that your Protoss characters seem to talk with a general sense of predictability,especially San'Dreale. I'm not sure; perhaps it's just a taste thing. Another thing is the way that you format your dialogue. The commas you put in certain areas are really confusing, as ... Click here to view this comment.

#12. Posted on April 27, 2008 07:22 AM. Hey, I'm still here! I just haven't been commenting as much because the writing here hasn't really intrigued me. Until now. I'll read this and then get back to you on it. And I'm still writing, though just not at as fast a pace as I used to. I have another piece coming out, and it's about ten pages into completion. ... Click here to view this comment.

#13. Posted on April 17, 2008 02:44 PM. It's sad how little people come to appreciate fiction these days. Anyways, it's a great work, so I suggest to all of you to read it. Still, I think a multitude of grammar problems bring down the quality of the work, but not by much, fortunately. ... Click here to view this comment.

#14. Posted on April 05, 2008 08:47 PM. I think I should give some constructive criticism towards by comment earlier. While the characters and basic outline of the story is quite nice, there are a lot of continuity issues with the story. Some of your words are used in the wrong places. Try reading it out a loud, and see if you can change certain words to make the story flow nicer. Also, I found that your characters are too obvious, and expected. As X9 put it, "sterotypical", as if I can guess what they are going to say b ... Click here to view this comment.

#15. Posted on March 15, 2008 09:00 AM. Wow, Proto, I love the way you shoot down every single person's comment. What class. ... Click here to view this comment.

#16. Posted on March 12, 2008 06:32 PM. Is it just me, or was protocol B much better than this? ... Click here to view this comment.

#17. Posted on February 21, 2008 03:26 PM. If you want to put some depth into this, something more than just quotes would be nice. ... Click here to view this comment.

#18. Posted on February 21, 2008 03:17 PM. top of the fiction list? really? ... Click here to view this comment.

#19. Posted on January 20, 2008 04:07 PM. Haha. I actually thoroughly enjoyed this. ... Click here to view this comment.

#20. Posted on December 06, 2007 10:15 AM. Thanks, X9. Yeah, I'm twisting the plot a little. I'm going to have it go from really confusing to making sense later in the story. ... Click here to view this comment.

#21. Posted on December 04, 2007 06:51 PM. If some of you are wondering why I'm using Tom's characters: I have his permission, don't worry. ;P ... Click here to view this comment.

#22. Posted on December 03, 2007 07:59 PM. Way to go, Smasher! You've come a long way since the beginning, of that I am positive. Some grammatical misplacements, but in time you'll get your writing style sorted out. I'm impressed! ... Click here to view this comment.

#23. Posted on December 03, 2007 07:58 PM. Beautifully written, with some exception. From what I can deduce, you aren't much for writing action. Hardell's part was rushed, and it seemed weak, for your standard. There was little character, and strangely, little description as well. Nevertheless, the rest made up for that. ... Click here to view this comment.

#24. Posted on November 22, 2007 07:14 PM. I must say, you caught yourself halfway between humor and remorse (with that last sentence). Not that interesting, truth be told. I've seen many things like this that are much better. The grammar also leaves something to be desired, in my opinion. And if you want best quality humor, I would advise you take out the grave thing, because it's just stupid. ... Click here to view this comment.

#25. Posted on November 13, 2007 03:55 PM. What has become of the pop fic section? ... Click here to view this comment.

#26. Posted on October 22, 2007 07:42 PM. I happen to believe if you can't put a sentence together properly, I won't be interested in your work. ... Click here to view this comment.

#27. Posted on October 20, 2007 09:55 PM. I don't agree. Spelling and grammar account for just as much as the writing itself - I don't know how many times I've had to stress that point. If you can't get good spelling and grammar, what entices people to read? Nothing. ... Click here to view this comment.

#28. Posted on October 11, 2007 04:57 PM. Lots of concepts errors. I'll give you one: if she could have dosed the painkillers, why didn't she do it in the first place instead of having Jon haul her down the hall? Misuse of some words, including 'she mistakenly put weight on her leg.' Mistakenly should be used at the end as 'by mistake', or else the sentence doesn't sound right. There's a whole bunch of stuff like that; I certainly don't see him (no offense) being anywhere NEAR deadfast, so don't get head-tight about that idea. ... Click here to view this comment.

#29. Posted on October 10, 2007 07:29 PM. Toooooooooooooooooooooooooom. What's up? I'm still busy with Shadowblade, but I'm taking a little break and wanted to see what's up with you. It seems like good fiction is hard to find these days. :| ... Click here to view this comment.

#30. Posted on October 05, 2007 01:51 PM. Didn't I read this on Warboards? I swear to God I did. I also swear I commented there. And aren't you DragonPaladin? ... Click here to view this comment.

#31. Posted on October 05, 2007 01:38 PM. L0L... DA, you may be right about the entertainment value thing. On the other hand, even the most violent of books can have some sort of objective goal instead of simple, inane fighting. Wouldn't you agree? ... Click here to view this comment.

#32. Posted on October 04, 2007 04:42 PM. Not the best fiction, but understandably good for a first attempt. I am a big fan of your renders, however. ... Click here to view this comment.

#33. Posted on September 24, 2007 06:21 PM. Not yet. However, if you're looking for a rank, I would recommend Colonel. ... Click here to view this comment.

#34. Posted on September 23, 2007 07:45 AM. Just because you're twelve doesn't give you the excuse to put ten lines of text together and submit it. This piece is cheap and effortless. ... Click here to view this comment.

#35. Posted on September 22, 2007 06:55 AM. Pretty bad. It's too short to be anything. Btw, I wouldn't be bragging about being twelve. I wrote much more when I was that age. ... Click here to view this comment.

#36. Posted on September 05, 2007 07:54 PM. I read yours, Haladras. You read mine now. It's on Warboards, adjacent to yours, I think. ... Click here to view this comment.

#37. Posted on September 03, 2007 09:38 AM. Sure, I understand. But perhaps you can substitute for General, that would help quite a bit. And it also has a better ring to it, imho. ;P Okay, I read it. I'd like to say that it is a fine piece of work, and it does flow quite nicely above all else. I'm a bit confused about what ]] these things are, and I would suggest you use italics or at least caps instead. Much more effective. Furthermore, I think your story lack what is the characters' innate thoughts. If Daniel is your main protagonis ... Click here to view this comment.

#38. Posted on September 02, 2007 05:34 PM. Written a bit poorly. Sub-standard. Bad description, verb use, dialogue. I don't get much out of the plot so far, and perspectives change too quickly; rushed. ... Click here to view this comment.

#39. Posted on September 02, 2007 04:36 PM. I suppose I'll read this soon. Just a note, however. Sergeants aren't higher enough ranks to have the privilege of office positions. They're on the field as much as Privates are. ... Click here to view this comment.

#40. Posted on August 31, 2007 02:29 PM. I find the front of the Battlecruiser is a bit plump for the rest of the body, and the color doesn't suit the black of the rest. ... Click here to view this comment.

#41. Posted on August 31, 2007 02:26 PM. I find the writing style is sort of juvenile. Language certainly wasn't a virtue. But it was a good plot, so I think it is on-and-off decent. Good. ... Click here to view this comment.

#42. Posted on August 31, 2007 11:28 AM. Why would you do that? ... Click here to view this comment.

#43. Posted on August 31, 2007 10:40 AM. Lol, would they be playing Starcraft in the world, Starcraft? ... Click here to view this comment.

#44. Posted on August 30, 2007 08:59 PM. Exceptional. I didn't read Mantis's comment but shut up anyways, from what I got of the quotes. ... Click here to view this comment.

#45. Posted on August 30, 2007 07:58 PM. The Thor is the most, fucking beautiful thing I've ever seen! Lol, maybe not, but still! @##$@#$%$%^&%^&*&%^#! ... Click here to view this comment.

#46. Posted on August 29, 2007 06:51 PM. Yeah, I know what you mean. I used to be, well if I say so myself, awesome, but after nine months inactivity I have been reduced to UMS and money maps, unfortunately. To add insult to injury, my accounts were frozen over. Nice seeing you around as always. Btw, I have a great new story idea, but I can't work on it because I want to finish JR. ... Click here to view this comment.

#47. Posted on August 29, 2007 03:01 PM. Hey Hal, how come Shadebeast is only on Warboards? ... Click here to view this comment.

#48. Posted on August 29, 2007 02:59 PM. Very nice. Lots longer than the previous one, and certainly much more enjoyable. There was a lot of dialogue, and I am pleased with that, since - as always - it certainly is pleasurable dialogue with realism and a distinguishing sense of character. You have a great feel for the ideology behind your characters and each bear their own 'shit' that we can relate to. Exceptional, as always. Looking forward to more. P.S. How are you at actually PLAYING starcraft. For one thing, I'm crap, and was j ... Click here to view this comment.

#49. Posted on August 28, 2007 09:02 PM. ^^ Great, as per Balance. However, definitely not Elite Fiction stuff. Exp, anyhoo. ... Click here to view this comment.

#50. Posted on August 28, 2007 07:35 AM. I'm afraid you've got some of society's balances wrong, as you have in the first one. Some of your racial or discriminatory concepts are a bit whacked. For example, in the first one, they wouldn't have denied him access, but would have let him be SEATED, then wait for the right time to pick him apart about not being able to afford stuff. As in the first one, you have quite a few exaggerations, such as the submachinegunners in the restaurant in the prologue. Some of your dialogue is hard to under ... Click here to view this comment.

#51. Posted on August 27, 2007 09:03 PM. I don't really like the way the story flows. Not that great. Some realism issues to be dealt with, including the minute fact that people wouldn't call him 'marine' but 'sir', even if the man of beckoning is not all that formal. Slightly rushed, without much of a plot or exceptional withstandings, but a good first effort. Keep trying, MrAnderson, I believe you have good introspective sheen. ... Click here to view this comment.

#52. Posted on August 26, 2007 08:12 AM. A bit too dark to see, but it's pretty good! ... Click here to view this comment.

#53. Posted on August 25, 2007 09:51 AM. Yes, we should. I've written a tiny bit, but I won't show you until I've polished it off. ... Click here to view this comment.

#54. Posted on August 19, 2007 07:43 PM. Haladras, I agree and disagree with you. I disagree about Reaper personalities. Beyond everything, Reapers are simply resocialized marines with spiffier gear. I do SORT OF agree with you about the morales. I know you are generally one to stress values rather than action considering your own pieces, but this is a different nature of writing just as effective. ... Click here to view this comment.

#55. Posted on August 17, 2007 09:03 PM. Hey Darkfury. We should really start on that letter. Anyways, I thought this abstract was not as good as your previous. Too scattered, imo. I think you'd be really good at a short story, though. What really detracted from this was the excessive narrative from a birds-eye view. Take it from the characters perspectives solely. Don't carry it out with too much detail. Let the subtlety capture the reader; that is what a short story is all about. ... Click here to view this comment.

#56. Posted on August 15, 2007 03:33 PM. I really like the color. ... Click here to view this comment.

#57. Posted on August 15, 2007 03:33 PM. Not bad, though the legs are a bit stumpy. ... Click here to view this comment.

#58. Posted on August 14, 2007 08:20 PM. I read it. Grammar. Badly need lessons on that. Start new lines when the character of speech changes. Speech tags are written wrong. There are some major flaws in the storyline, including the fact that the body of the story fluxes badly. For example, the opening launches forwards so quick we hardly have time to breathe. The transmissions statements should be differentiated with punctation of some sort. There's a million things. To add to that, you have a structure of a novel and the length ... Click here to view this comment.

#59. Posted on August 14, 2007 06:50 AM. How about this: every single book on THIS planet, dating back to 1800, that's a NOVEL, uses quotations. ... Click here to view this comment.

#60. Posted on August 13, 2007 04:13 PM. Oh, man...The stuff they have at analogsf is intense. I've never seen anything like it... ... Click here to view this comment.

#61. Posted on August 13, 2007 04:00 PM. One thing: though I do like Comedy Central and watch it frequently, I suggest you not put that in there. Definitely not. ... Click here to view this comment.

#62. Posted on August 13, 2007 03:58 PM. Actually, no. Quotations is correct. Yours is WAY wrong. I think what you might be thinking of is, double quotations and single quotations. THOSE TWO are both correct. ... Click here to view this comment.

#63. Posted on August 12, 2007 08:43 PM. MinusHuman, my guess would be approximately ten. Correct me if I'm wrong. Then, again, being only fourteen, I'm easily disillusioned. Wait...Life as a Dropship or Life as a Dropship PILOT? I'm getting a bit of a Thomas the Tank Engine kind of feel, here.. ... Click here to view this comment.

#64. Posted on August 12, 2007 08:33 PM. What's this thing n self publishing? I might be interested. Ha, I checked out Lulu. It's mainly a bunch of promotional hooey that requires you actually HAVING a book printed and worked out and such. Therefore, you need other editors and so it defeats the purpose of not just going STRAIGHT to others. Bookmarks, flyers. That's a load of bull. Lol. Tom, you need a Bloomsbury Publishing. ... Click here to view this comment.

#65. Posted on August 12, 2007 04:39 PM. Erm. Do you know how to write dialogue? Quotations, not dashes. ... Click here to view this comment.

#66. Posted on August 12, 2007 04:34 PM. Still no real guidelines after two years. ... Click here to view this comment.

#67. Posted on August 12, 2007 04:30 PM. It doesn't have shape at all. There is really no resemblance. Also, it looks like the cannon is too heavy and that the whole thing will topple at the slightest finger push. ... Click here to view this comment.

#68. Posted on August 12, 2007 04:24 PM. So many factual and foundational errors that I suggest you stick to humor stories, where all that is excused. ... Click here to view this comment.

#69. Posted on August 12, 2007 04:04 PM. Not bad. Indeed, it is quite good. Quite good. Some minor notes but since you are a new writer I will afford these slight mistakes. Just one thing: Confederacy's, not Confederacies, in your context of writing. ... Click here to view this comment.

#70. Posted on August 12, 2007 01:36 PM. You'd need at least 100 officers to man the nest. And then you need - remember - people like kitchen staff, cleaning staff, guardsment, and engineers. In total, at least 3 or 400. *guardsmen ... Click here to view this comment.

#71. Posted on August 12, 2007 08:20 AM. Aye. Very good. I have to say though, Tarken to me needs to be a bit more desperate. ... Click here to view this comment.

#72. Posted on August 11, 2007 10:44 AM. It's your fault your reading it on the website, Batchelor. Doesn't mean he has to reduce paragraphs. Geez, get it straight. Exp, btw. Hey Minus, yeah I'm still writing. Check it out if you can. Yeah, unfortunately, Dontshoot has left. He hasn't signed on since July 21st of last year. He might be using a different alias, I'm not sure, but from what I'm getting he might've joined the marines. So what's up with you? ... Click here to view this comment.

#73. Posted on August 10, 2007 08:49 PM. They should make some new ones, like iGenocide, and iPandemic. ... Click here to view this comment.

#74. Posted on August 10, 2007 08:42 PM. Yeah Tom, definitely. I can't believe this slipped under my radar without me noticing. I will read it ASAP. Slightly short for you, though, right? ... Click here to view this comment.

#75. Posted on August 10, 2007 08:39 PM. Batchelor, I don't know what you're talking about. His piece is paperbook quality. You're crazy. ... Click here to view this comment.

#76. Posted on August 10, 2007 03:27 PM. lolz. ... Click here to view this comment.

#77. Posted on August 09, 2007 09:00 PM. Lol Sololop8, I agree. You wouldn't really think that a Raider like him would have time to cut his hair, would you? ... Click here to view this comment.

#78. Posted on August 09, 2007 08:56 PM. I must say, your writing style has changed - for the better part - than the style that comprise Conspiracies of the Confederacy and the likes of Silence. Lots more description, thorough in-depth psychoanalysis and action among many other things. Definitely novel-quality. I haven't really gotten through it yet but this one looks killer. Btw, sry to be a bother, but what does the reaper do? Because I haven't been following up on SC2 quite yet. ... Click here to view this comment.

#79. Posted on August 08, 2007 08:00 PM. I don't like the format for the new campaign. I'm all for the graphics, but not the format. The different characters move in and out and different stuff happens in the command room just makes it feel like an RPG and that's not what it is. I also don't like the idea of buying units 'off' the field of battle because that's just lame. ... Click here to view this comment.

#80. Posted on August 08, 2007 02:29 PM. Duke didn't die that way, btw. ... Click here to view this comment.

#81. Posted on August 06, 2007 12:22 PM. He always had that much hair; it was just buzzed. And I think the accent is less redneck than his original. ... Click here to view this comment.

#82. Posted on August 04, 2007 03:32 PM. Well, I was being sarcastic, but sure. ... Click here to view this comment.

#83. Posted on August 04, 2007 01:54 PM. Extra Sexual Perception! I'm all for it! ... Click here to view this comment.

#84. Posted on July 27, 2007 08:23 AM. Dang, I'm so sorry. Hurry, write something uber, and then reclaim the spot! ... Click here to view this comment.

#85. Posted on July 27, 2007 07:36 AM. Mr Anderson, I need to extrapolate on teh storyline or else it's a bit boring.I keep the foundation, tweak the rest. That's how conspiracy theorists work. ... Click here to view this comment.

#86. Posted on July 26, 2007 07:33 PM. Tom, where are you, Tom? I am in need of some classic literary entertainment that only you can provide with your brilliant stories! How can you keep in tormenting wait so, so long? Lol. ... Click here to view this comment.

#87. Posted on July 26, 2007 07:31 PM. I hate to be a nag about this wonderful, wonderful template, but, it does seem to me that the logout function does not work, and will go to a 'this page cannot be displayed' page. The logout does take effect, however, because when I click back several times I realize I am no longer signed in. ... Click here to view this comment.

#88. Posted on July 26, 2007 07:24 PM. Who approved this one? Just so you know, in case your new, you generally have to write more than one page or else it's just not worth the effort of reading when dozens other writers write for pages and have their stuff bumped. Please, write more. Plus, this has no plot. If it is part of some larger storyline, I would recommend you wait to finish the entire thing and then post so a) it would make more sense and b) it wouldn't piss people off as much for the shortness. Besides, you can't e ... Click here to view this comment.

#89. Posted on July 26, 2007 07:20 PM. No offense, but I found this one to be a bit sallow. It doesn't have a good feel as an intro to a chapter, and as a continues it continues to be sparse. 1) Not enough descriptors will kill a story with monotony. 2) Some factual errors; look up how carriers are manned, because I'm pretty sure you don't just put them on autopilot and then get a coffee. 3) The interaction between Protoss and Terran is completely wrong. You've got the depiction of the Protoss wrong. 4) Space out your dialogue; ... Click here to view this comment.

#90. Posted on July 26, 2007 03:13 PM. I'm still not sure about the side toolbars. The long titled works are all mashed up. ... Click here to view this comment.

#91. Posted on July 26, 2007 12:32 PM. Great story. Really bundles up neatly in a gift basket, dudn't it? J.K. Anyways, it's awesome, though I will admit the idea crossed my story maps before but I would never have pulled it off as good as you. Definitely A-Grade. Long, too. Exceptional Effort. ... Click here to view this comment.

#92. Posted on July 26, 2007 12:29 PM. I just reread it. I noticed one more thing I failed to mention earlier. There, for it to be more of a story and less of an autobiographical denunciation. Instead of just relaying the events, you need to put some sort of partial narrative to actualise the feeling of the character. s'all. ... Click here to view this comment.

#93. Posted on July 26, 2007 12:25 PM. I still disagree about Mengsk. You know his personality downpat. No argument there. It's just some of the things he says. His vernacular is a bit awkward, when I read it, that's all. Now would be one time I would tell you to bunch up as many big words as you can. He is a man of confusing others, remember. ... Click here to view this comment.

#94. Posted on July 26, 2007 12:13 PM. Thanks. There's going to be fighting, but I'm building it up for an explosive finale. I've already almost finished. ... Click here to view this comment.

#95. Posted on July 26, 2007 08:05 AM. I do agree with Hal. There is a strategy in writing where u gradually expose all your information through subtle forshadowing, and, exposure via character's dialogue. ... Click here to view this comment.

#96. Posted on July 25, 2007 07:24 PM. Definitely great. Some opinionated stuff I don't want to give out because I think it's too much based on my own personal thought and won't do you much good; tis very good already and if you edit it yourself it can be a very promised piece. Keep aspiring. ... Click here to view this comment.

#97. Posted on July 25, 2007 07:15 PM. I'm still seeing some weird glitches. E.g. the toolbar is mysteriously showing up at the bottom of the screen and the sidebars are all mashed up now. ... Click here to view this comment.

#98. Posted on July 25, 2007 07:14 PM. Shit... That is sick. I assume, though, that they haven't finished Zerg? ... Click here to view this comment.

#99. Posted on July 25, 2007 05:39 PM. Ah, it'll be fun at the beginning, but kinda sag at the end. oops, sorry. ... Click here to view this comment.

#100. Posted on July 25, 2007 09:09 AM. The striking mix of both simplicity and complexity woven around a strong, understandable storyline. ... Click here to view this comment.

#101. Posted on July 25, 2007 08:53 AM. Erm, the fiction mod and art toolbars at the side are a bit clustered. They used to have hyphens to differentiate the different stuff, but that seems to have disappeared. ... Click here to view this comment.

#102. Posted on July 24, 2007 05:48 PM. Hey anyone here finish Harry Potter? ... Click here to view this comment.

#103. Posted on July 24, 2007 08:51 AM. two other things, that i just noticed. there's no link to the homepage so it's a bit harder to access. And also, the passwords should continue to be concealed as little stars rather than show the passwords. That way, the password is too exposed. ... Click here to view this comment.

#104. Posted on July 24, 2007 08:09 AM. the only thing i don't like is the user toolbar is a bit crammed at the top right. but the rest is great. ... Click here to view this comment.

#105. Posted on July 21, 2007 09:23 AM. You, my friend, have outdone yourself. One beef: I think, in due haste to contrast your Protoss and Terran speech patterns, you've made the Terrans sound slightly juvenile. I don't exactly like Mengsk's script. ... Click here to view this comment.

#106. Posted on July 20, 2007 05:05 PM. Hurry, write more! Don't let the others take your berth! You are writer Supremo! Vive le Resistance de Tom! ... Click here to view this comment.

#107. Posted on July 08, 2007 01:16 PM. Be honest, is this only because you didn't know how to draw protoss-trained PROTOSS girls? XD ... Click here to view this comment.

#108. Posted on July 07, 2007 07:23 AM. Cool effect. ... Click here to view this comment.

#109. Posted on July 07, 2007 07:21 AM. First of all, it would be Sarah Roks. Who would put their last name as a child? ... Click here to view this comment.

#110. Posted on July 06, 2007 06:28 PM. Man, you should really read your first works. Vintage was the best. ... Click here to view this comment.

#111. Posted on July 06, 2007 06:27 PM. The vets don't check in in frequent intervals. ... Click here to view this comment.

#112. Posted on July 06, 2007 06:24 PM. You're number one! You're number one! You're number one! You're number one! You're number one! You're number one! ... Click here to view this comment.

#113. Posted on July 06, 2007 08:03 AM. Well, you could start my fixing all your grammar. ... Click here to view this comment.

#114. Posted on July 05, 2007 08:25 PM. Written like the abstract of a gaming catalogue. Its licensed if it's only your first time writing, but seriously, a very juvenile piece of work. Below Average. The length, too, is short. ... Click here to view this comment.

#115. Posted on July 05, 2007 05:18 PM. The one good thing about my concept is you can always write the most exciting parts first, and that way you never get bored of writing and subsequently there is a lesser chance you'll give up on the piece. ... Click here to view this comment.

#116. Posted on July 05, 2007 08:05 AM. lol, i commented. The reason, though, I can't submit anything is cause i write selectively, which means i jump through the storyline as i write, and plan to fill in all the blanks later. If i ever submitted that, It would just look like a huge jumble of nothing. ... Click here to view this comment.

#117. Posted on July 05, 2007 08:04 AM. I especially liked the open thesis on Corso. It was amazing-calibre work. Exceptional. P.S. Don't get your tusks in a tussle over the votes. Most of the Elite Fics and other good ones have suffered the very thing as well. ... Click here to view this comment.

#118. Posted on July 02, 2007 09:38 PM. exceptional. Elegant drawing. ... Click here to view this comment.

#119. Posted on June 30, 2007 05:42 PM. Lol. But Geez you write fast. ... Click here to view this comment.

#120. Posted on June 30, 2007 08:43 AM. I think quantity is good. Too many stories here don't have enough detail to be of any novel merit. ... Click here to view this comment.

#121. Posted on June 29, 2007 05:08 PM. Not to mention, the pace which you pump these stories out is incredulous. I started like two months before you and you already have like quadruple my material. ... Click here to view this comment.

#122. Posted on June 29, 2007 01:59 PM. I plan to finish at least thirty pages before sending my next one out. Got around 19 so far. Anyways, a University writing course would help substantially. I'll do that sometime when I have the chance. Of course, you're good enough without it. ... Click here to view this comment.

#123. Posted on June 27, 2007 08:05 PM. I decided to read it all at once and then comment. One Word: Brilliant. Your writing style is so intricate and yet so subtle that I have a hard time placing a finger on it, though I do admire and one day hope to aspire to it. Five Thumbs up! You don't need to hear nitpicky details from me, you have my complete adulation. ... Click here to view this comment.

#124. Posted on June 26, 2007 05:44 PM. Factual Date: Ghosts are extremely displine-manifest characters, and are sometimes not exactly the most sane. Ghosts on Vacations is extremely unrealistic. By reading this, I now know you have no concept of the Starcraft Universe. ... Click here to view this comment.

#125. Posted on June 26, 2007 05:20 PM. Exceptional stuff! ... Click here to view this comment.

#126. Posted on June 26, 2007 01:49 PM. Then, the air was scarred by the arcing light, and the chiaroscuro landscape was briefly illuminated in the furious life of a quanta discharge. It was not the promethean proportions of the event that held in abeyance the life of Lieutenant Aaron Sanders, Terran Confederacy Engineering Corps, but rather, the stochasticness and promiscuousness of the brilliance. The incendiary force was tragically devastating, and as the fading residual light raised on alien energies in a vertical column into the ... Click here to view this comment.

#127. Posted on June 17, 2007 09:07 AM. I can say this: Your Protoss talk like juvenile kids, or teenages marines, to say the least. They don't sound like Protoss at all. ... Click here to view this comment.

#128. Posted on June 14, 2007 03:35 PM. the terrain is kinda disappointing in the first clip. Personally, I loved the space platform terrain, but this terrain looks like something from a fairy MMORPG. ... Click here to view this comment.

#129. Posted on June 08, 2007 08:29 AM. Besides, you might be overrusing your vocabulary. I find, at least. ... Click here to view this comment.

#130. Posted on June 07, 2007 09:14 PM. Cuss what? ... Click here to view this comment.

#131. Posted on June 07, 2007 08:32 PM. One word: Godmodding. ... Click here to view this comment.

#132. Posted on June 07, 2007 08:31 PM. Exceptional would be if it had length. Average. Too many hard-working writers have done too much for this to be taking one of their places with less than five hundred words to count. ... Click here to view this comment.

#133. Posted on June 05, 2007 04:28 PM. Nuke Cola, Supernova's Men's Club! Talk about some cross-advertising! ... Click here to view this comment.

#134. Posted on June 05, 2007 04:15 PM. X9, you're a major??! PM me on that. ... Click here to view this comment.

#135. Posted on June 05, 2007 04:08 PM. Avg. ... Click here to view this comment.

#136. Posted on June 03, 2007 12:47 PM. Oh, fuck dude. That is the bestest thing i've seen in a long time. And those little floaty things are reapers, right? EXP ... Click here to view this comment.

#137. Posted on June 03, 2007 12:44 PM. Don't get too freaked out, Gantrithor. You should be lucky your getting average because I think BA is justified. I just don't know what to say except read some other fiction to get a better idea. Characters are all radical and don't follow realism too much. Grammar leaves something to be desired. Pace is sporadic and uncomfortable. Some lines cliche and dialogue is poor. ... Click here to view this comment.

#138. Posted on June 03, 2007 12:42 PM. Thx for the comments guys. I've suffered some downtime but more comments would be well appreciated. ... Click here to view this comment.

#139. Posted on June 03, 2007 12:36 PM. Hey tom, long time no see. I've had internet troubles for about a month. Well, I'll get to reading this ASAP. hopefully, my internet will stay intact. ... Click here to view this comment.

#140. Posted on May 30, 2007 08:08 PM. Sry, X9, i'm with undead52 on this. Put less leeway in your ratings. No length, and no plot, and pretty much no premises. Pretty Bad. ... Click here to view this comment.

#141. Posted on April 29, 2007 09:14 AM. Duke wasn't a warrior. He was a General. The whole thing with the mysterious hallway is so unorthodox you might as well be including flying pink ponies and strawberry fairies. You're trying a horror/thriller type, although not very successfully, while incorporating starcraft. Do one or the other, don't try to do both. Or while you're at it, do one with mario and luigi in it. And if you want something like this, you probably shouldn't be mentioning the funeral, since it really does nothing to ... Click here to view this comment.

#142. Posted on April 29, 2007 09:12 AM. i think your first one is better, although it is less detailed, at least its proportionate. ... Click here to view this comment.

#143. Posted on April 26, 2007 02:03 PM. Ouch. This could use some major learning-to-write lessons. ... Click here to view this comment.

#144. Posted on April 22, 2007 06:30 PM. Wow. This is certainly a new and creative approach to writing Starcraft, and though it might be subject to controversy, I think that this was a brilliant story. Personally, it was awesome. One thing that bugged me was the weaker connection of David; there is little foreshadowing to lead to the last two sentences, adn because it is a short story it can detract drastically. Give more of David's background in any shape, size or form, and then have it relate to him being a christian somehow so ... Click here to view this comment.

#145. Posted on April 21, 2007 03:57 PM. what issues? ... Click here to view this comment.

#146. Posted on April 21, 2007 01:09 PM. "Jimmy Raynor fired a U-238 armor-piercing bullet at a Confederate Marine. The powerful gauss shot shattered the Confederates faceplate and the bullet had gone through the back of the marine’s head out with blood and brain tissue had splatted out with the frequency of the bullet. The enemy Marine dropped and General Raynor signaled the way was clear for Alpha Squad to move forward. Raynor and twelve Marines under Raynor’s Raiders cladded in CMC-300 Assault armor cautiously moved forward. Th ... Click here to view this comment.

#147. Posted on April 21, 2007 01:04 PM. AtomicKitten, that was not the reason for the BA, but just some minor details that should have been made to show any credibility in author's writing. Also, different speech tags should be underlined with a new section, but not continued in the same paragraph, causing confusion in what you are reading. Anyhow, something in all your characters make them sound the exact same, and let me tell you, the reaction of the Commander Roxer is not something you would have a trained personnel reactin ... Click here to view this comment.

#148. Posted on April 20, 2007 02:26 PM. "In Utero" is a very very good album. ... Click here to view this comment.

#149. Posted on April 20, 2007 12:29 PM. sorry mate, I want to, but just don't have the time. I have this huge thing going on at school, and am taking time off for other things. I'll get to it ASAP. It's on my agenda, don't worry. ... Click here to view this comment.

#150. Posted on April 20, 2007 12:28 PM. Too short. Some of the stuff is flawed, and some minor grammar details. I find it is quite unrealistic for Raynor to be infested. I don't think it'll ever happen, or if anyone intended for it to happen, just because of his character and his personality. The rest, I think, is just slightly short and uninspired. -Average- ... Click here to view this comment.

#151. Posted on April 20, 2007 12:21 PM. Thanks, mate. I'm following the storyline as close as possible though. ... Click here to view this comment.

#152. Posted on April 15, 2007 07:10 AM. Is it just me, or is the staff in complete hibernation, even with the additions of nineteen new people? ... Click here to view this comment.

#153. Posted on April 15, 2007 07:08 AM. Use of dialogue is poor and the lines don't match up. Also, you're supposed to start new lines when different people talk. Capitals are extremely ineffective, use italics. below average ... Click here to view this comment.

#154. Posted on April 11, 2007 06:07 PM. I'm taking a break from SC writing because i'm tackling real writing. I'm doing a 30 page essay for class on the industrialization of fossil fuels. ... Click here to view this comment.

#155. Posted on April 07, 2007 03:34 PM. One pointer, that Hitler and Bin Laden thing doesn't quite fit. Also, I find that you're using too many descriptives for the speech tags. Just my thoughts. ... Click here to view this comment.

#156. Posted on April 04, 2007 03:41 PM. New blood? ... Click here to view this comment.

#157. Posted on April 01, 2007 06:42 PM. yo Haladras how far are you from finishing SoW? I quit after you quit the first time, you know. It's your fault. XD ... Click here to view this comment.

#158. Posted on March 27, 2007 07:12 PM. She looks like such an artsy-type... I think that's too stereotype a comment. Anyways...No offense, but the abstract sounds a tad corny. ... Click here to view this comment.

#159. Posted on March 20, 2007 08:06 PM. Why would you submit something unfinished? ... Click here to view this comment.

#160. Posted on March 02, 2007 09:10 PM. Btw, you are aware of what Alcatraz really was, right? ... Click here to view this comment.

#161. Posted on February 28, 2007 02:17 PM. Friends go nowhere, Geckat. lol. ... Click here to view this comment.

#162. Posted on February 27, 2007 07:24 PM. Sincerely hope you get your staff position back. ... Click here to view this comment.

#163. Posted on February 27, 2007 05:32 PM. Pity goes nowhere, K. Lol. ... Click here to view this comment.

#164. Posted on February 27, 2007 05:26 PM. I don't know...Something's weird. Your writing style has evolved too greatly, and frankly it's been blown way out of proportion. Try and continue to cut back on vocab, as I can see you have tried to do a significant amount of cutting, it seems that the vernacular in this story is much reduced than the lexis of the other. Nevertheless, it could still be trimmed. Good effort, I'll vote when I'm done reading. ... Click here to view this comment.

#165. Posted on February 21, 2007 08:10 PM. Don't diss Geckat. He was former staff. ... Click here to view this comment.

#166. Posted on February 21, 2007 02:31 PM. Are you sure? Maybe that's a blooper. Sry. I'll fix it. Fixed. This was a weak chapter, I admit it. I think VII is alot better. It will be out soon. XD ... Click here to view this comment.

#167. Posted on February 19, 2007 04:11 PM. Too bad you had to forfeit your position. ... Click here to view this comment.

#168. Posted on February 19, 2007 04:10 PM. Hey Starcraft, long time no see. How'ya been doing? I'll get to this ASAP, clone, lol. Homework...Gr... ... Click here to view this comment.

#169. Posted on February 18, 2007 08:54 AM. This isn't how Dr. Seuss wrote his poetry. ... Click here to view this comment.

#170. Posted on February 18, 2007 08:11 AM. Better. Last time you indeed wrote Terran, but it was an Admiral, a more prominent and sophisticated character, so it was more understandable. ... Click here to view this comment.

#171. Posted on February 17, 2007 05:21 PM. That's cuz last time you wrote Protoss, which is probably the best depiction to exist here, but for Terran it doesn't match. ... Click here to view this comment.

#172. Posted on February 17, 2007 05:19 PM. Geck, how did u fix your net? ... Click here to view this comment.

#173. Posted on February 16, 2007 08:39 PM. Proto, what I meant was that little can be detracteed from a small resume, therefore, admins have a difficult job denoting personalities from a written document. That's why if they PM any of the candidates they risk information leak. Btw, Entropy, the advertising thing doesn't work. Imo. ... Click here to view this comment.

#174. Posted on February 15, 2007 07:53 PM. T'was a weak joke. ... Click here to view this comment.

#175. Posted on February 15, 2007 07:52 PM. Little can be put in the faith of a small resume. ... Click here to view this comment.

#176. Posted on February 15, 2007 06:59 PM. I would wager they aren't. Didn't you hear one of the admins? They don't want people going about screeching their positions as lucky candidates. ... Click here to view this comment.

#177. Posted on February 15, 2007 06:54 PM. What do you mean? ... Click here to view this comment.

#178. Posted on February 15, 2007 03:54 PM. Fanfiction.net is balls. I tried it. And it's way too branched out to be of any real use to the scope of starcraft. ... Click here to view this comment.

#179. Posted on February 15, 2007 02:46 PM. Jimmy Neutron was a good show. ... Click here to view this comment.

#180. Posted on February 15, 2007 05:32 AM. Ah well. Screw it. Thanks for the comments. Besides, I don't think two words in teh same order can exactly be called stealing, and I've never read a book with the line of work thing in it. Butoh well. BEsides, this chapter isn't exactly all that great. It's just a confluence that I probably should've taped to another chapter. ... Click here to view this comment.

#181. Posted on February 14, 2007 04:21 PM. Doesn't make sense, and the dead marine corpse is blue, not red. ... Click here to view this comment.

#182. Posted on February 13, 2007 08:11 PM. X9, your comments are greatly appreciated and have been taken into account. However, I don't like technology references. IT gets way too techy and then it is boring, confusing, and colorless, in my opinion. Meh, supposed it could work, but I don't see many fics out there with that kind of stuff. ... Click here to view this comment.

#183. Posted on February 13, 2007 08:08 PM. Schwitzer said they have the candidates ready. When will they post 'em? ... Click here to view this comment.

#184. Posted on February 13, 2007 05:17 PM. Ok your other ones were ball-sucking but this one is hilarious! EXP ... Click here to view this comment.

#185. Posted on February 13, 2007 04:31 PM. Some grammar issues. Sentences sound clumped up and fragmented. "I was running for my life along side Betty, a Medic as well as my best friend. We were being chased by a pack of Zerglings infesting the Command Center. My Gauss Rifle was running low on ammunition, I had no time to reload and I was running out of stim packs for Betty and I. The Zerglings would either outrun us or we were going to be trapped in a dead end." Little to no description, like a grammar excercise. Av ... Click here to view this comment.

#186. Posted on February 13, 2007 04:29 PM. Below Average. First, it's too short. And second, your play with words is very poor. Besides, you can't give exact numbers in the story or it'll sound like a textbook description. Not good. Keep trying. ... Click here to view this comment.

#187. Posted on February 13, 2007 04:28 PM. Not ANNOYING or FUNNY. GAY ... Click here to view this comment.

#188. Posted on February 12, 2007 04:05 PM. Ghost of Onyx...Is that the Halo book? ... Click here to view this comment.

#189. Posted on February 11, 2007 08:08 PM. Awesome. It's weird. Bane isn't as acclaimed as it used to be, maybe because the old fans had migrated or left the site, and the new members are not influenced by Bane. It is sad. ... Click here to view this comment.

#190. Posted on February 11, 2007 08:07 PM. ... ... Click here to view this comment.

#191. Posted on February 11, 2007 05:21 PM. Okay. If you can't survive without a site for two days, you obviously have no life. Simple. ... Click here to view this comment.

#192. Posted on February 11, 2007 04:02 PM. Darkmirror? ?All Protoss knew the Xel'Naga, it's just that they grew extinct right after the Creation of the Protoss due to the creation of the Zerg. I agree, though, there is no interactio between the two races only because one is old and had died away very early. ... Click here to view this comment.

#193. Posted on February 11, 2007 03:51 PM. So there's more than one for fiction? YES!!! I still have a chance! ... Click here to view this comment.

#194. Posted on February 11, 2007 07:03 AM. Trust me, it's disappointing. Ah well. ... Click here to view this comment.

#195. Posted on February 10, 2007 02:09 PM. This should not be done until Sc.org is excavated and cleaned. I went through some submissions of over 2000 fanfics and I realized that at least 85% of that is just excess fossil that has been under a sedimentary strata for years and will probably never be revived, nor will there be a point for revival. We need to get rid of stuff, especially anonymous stuff that is short, and unread. ... Click here to view this comment.

#196. Posted on February 10, 2007 11:20 AM. Well, Kridicle you have alot of time. I just noticed a major flaw: if you shoot a bazooka at such velocity, it'll easily destroy everything at close proximity to the tank, and therefore, all the guards would have been long dead, as well as the tank crew. Anyways, It's really unrealistic to have marines go in with bazooks in covert missions. Usually, they have specialist units for those kind of jobs, and usually they are not covert. At all. ... Click here to view this comment.

#197. Posted on February 10, 2007 10:46 AM. Thumbs up! ... Click here to view this comment.

#198. Posted on February 10, 2007 07:03 AM. sweet ... Click here to view this comment.

#199. Posted on February 09, 2007 04:06 PM. So when will you write more? ... Click here to view this comment.

#200. Posted on February 09, 2007 03:42 PM. Your stuff is even too complex to be a scientific journal. It's starting to get unreadable. X9, go back, and read RR 1 again. That was perfect. Now your just trying too hard with too much fancy stuff. ... Click here to view this comment.

#201. Posted on February 09, 2007 03:34 PM. Torrasque is right. Advertising in this manner is the same as going on all the submissions on this site and advertising your work or your other piece that you want attention to. This is just spamming and congesting forums used for other purpose, and if you try and advocate your stuff on other sites, you'll be thrown out because they have their own interests. The only thing I would agree with is throwing the name sc.org out there, but never throwing out work from sc.org. I don't think it'll work. ... Click here to view this comment.

#202. Posted on February 09, 2007 07:08 AM. Here here. ... Click here to view this comment.

#203. Posted on February 09, 2007 07:05 AM. EXP. Very hilarious pose. ... Click here to view this comment.

#204. Posted on February 09, 2007 07:04 AM. I get it. It's not funny. ... Click here to view this comment.

#205. Posted on February 09, 2007 06:58 AM. Wow. Starcraft.org increased a few percent while warboards dropped 20+ %. Ouch. ... Click here to view this comment.

#206. Posted on February 09, 2007 06:50 AM. Pretty good.Length is to be desired, but it was good. The end wasn't corny. The queen description was brilliant. ... Click here to view this comment.

#207. Posted on February 09, 2007 06:41 AM. Use Quotations, not dashes. Some of the verses I can't tell whether ur trying to make them dialogue or just description. The lines are choppy and the battle doesn't make too much sense. There isn't much of an intro and the length is not too formidable, either. It was entertainment, but no where near inspiring. Below Average. ... Click here to view this comment.

#208. Posted on February 07, 2007 03:03 PM. Can you suggest someplace where it'll get decent criticism and suggestions and all the positive and helpful information? ... Click here to view this comment.

#209. Posted on February 07, 2007 03:00 PM. How many are you taking for ff? ... Click here to view this comment.

#210. Posted on February 07, 2007 02:25 PM. This was a good poll, but I'm not very enthused until all the candidates for the ff board are named. Want to spread some light on that topic, Ktan? ... Click here to view this comment.

#211. Posted on February 06, 2007 08:02 PM. This one is nice. Good. ... Click here to view this comment.

#212. Posted on February 06, 2007 05:13 PM. wtf r u talking about. You can't vote twice. ... Click here to view this comment.

#213. Posted on February 06, 2007 03:02 PM. Btw, when's the fics board gonna be up? Why do we always do fic last?? ... Click here to view this comment.

#214. Posted on February 05, 2007 07:44 PM. Fine. This is fucking great! there. ... Click here to view this comment.

#215. Posted on February 05, 2007 06:28 PM. I vote exceptional! jk. I hope this does get more input than the previous chapters, for all the output and effort I put into it! ... Click here to view this comment.

#216. Posted on February 05, 2007 06:23 PM. Beautiful. I commend you all! ... Click here to view this comment.

#217. Posted on February 05, 2007 05:18 AM. Btw, what's up with Geckat? ... Click here to view this comment.

#218. Posted on February 04, 2007 07:20 PM. I can't wait. I'm itching to know. And 500? And they're only taking one? Dang, my chances are going down the drainpipes as we speak. ... Click here to view this comment.

#219. Posted on February 04, 2007 05:10 PM. Wow, how to comment on an aspiring writer, IHZ. lol. See, now, I'm not gonna read this. ... Click here to view this comment.

#220. Posted on February 04, 2007 03:15 PM. Schwitzer ur not leaving? Damn I'm stupid. ... Click here to view this comment.

#221. Posted on February 04, 2007 07:15 AM. Bye. Geckat's left, and now Schwitzer. Now what? ... Click here to view this comment.

#222. Posted on February 03, 2007 08:43 PM. No offense, but I'm contradicting DA on this one. It's way too wordy. I ran it through MS, and even Microsoft said it was wordy wtih grammar check. ... Click here to view this comment.

#223. Posted on February 03, 2007 08:41 PM. What can I say? 5Daimyo said it all and gregleo2 already concurred. Well, brownie points for trying. And I can see that swearing is used frequently and excessively. I don't mind it, really; I use it alot as well, but I get the feeling that you are doing it just to make your piece better, which it probably would only do if you did it sparingly. ... Click here to view this comment.

#224. Posted on February 03, 2007 08:37 PM. thanks all ... Click here to view this comment.

#225. Posted on February 03, 2007 03:46 PM. Man, I love the idea of highlighting works of exceptional caliber. I think you oughta do the same with every other department, seeing as how the small toolbar on the side does little to nothing in terms of attracting attention. Kutos. Btw, It's ironic, I've never heard of Entropy, but hopefully we will get acquainted. (nice to meet you). Now get with the FanFics! ... Click here to view this comment.

#226. Posted on February 03, 2007 02:28 PM. Thank you. Btw, how many staff positions are there vacated for fan fiction? ... Click here to view this comment.

#227. Posted on February 03, 2007 08:02 AM. Yeah, I got that too. ... Click here to view this comment.

#228. Posted on February 03, 2007 07:04 AM. You can paste them from the site. ... Click here to view this comment.

#229. Posted on February 03, 2007 06:59 AM. Give us the final cut of candidates already! It's been a week! ... Click here to view this comment.

#230. Posted on February 01, 2007 08:08 PM. Before I read: I checked your site. Wow. Btw, whats up with the cash stuff? ... Click here to view this comment.

#231. Posted on February 01, 2007 05:04 PM. Yeah, honestly. ... Click here to view this comment.

#232. Posted on January 31, 2007 07:28 PM. -exceptional- I'm happy your stuff is still great, lizrd. It saddens me the stuff I read nowadays. Thumbs up. ... Click here to view this comment.

#233. Posted on January 31, 2007 07:23 PM. Good. In terms of being an essay. ... Click here to view this comment.

#234. Posted on January 31, 2007 07:22 PM. Solid writing. This piece definitely has potential. It is a good length, and doesn't have any grammar edits that hold it back in terms of it being illegible. I think overall this is a very concrete piece of work and that you should elaborate it vocabulary wise and all to make it even more illustrated and detailed for enjoyment. Good job. By the way, my friends and I use toadie as a term for those who are suckups. It was just a joke. I don't actually believe Adad is a toadie, just a firm be ... Click here to view this comment.

#235. Posted on January 31, 2007 07:19 PM. X9: unnecessary voting. Don't bring back karma. That's the job of the Karma police. As for this piece, I don't really understand it. I have no bloody idea what this is about. If you're trying Shakespearean writing, you have failed, my friend. ... Click here to view this comment.

#236. Posted on January 31, 2007 07:00 PM. And that is why you are not a staff member. ... Click here to view this comment.

#237. Posted on January 30, 2007 02:31 PM. Thanks deadfast. I wanted to add that this is but a prologue, so all discrepancies will be later explained, in the first part I'm writing, but you're arguments are indeed plausible and I will raise them to question when I write. Thanks for the comments. You'll notice this is the only comment I have even bothered replying to. Thanks. P.S. Some of the parts I made short because they add to the clandestine-ness that is in need of resolve. I don't know whether I was completely successful at ... Click here to view this comment.

#238. Posted on January 30, 2007 02:29 PM. Azreal is either a toadie or a shadow, whichever. ... Click here to view this comment.

#239. Posted on January 29, 2007 07:40 PM. Or...They like us to die of anticipation. Ever consider that? ... Click here to view this comment.

#240. Posted on January 29, 2007 07:05 PM. What are you, adad, a toadie? ;P This is okay, for a first series, at least. I might write a critique later. Gl with the rest. ... Click here to view this comment.

#241. Posted on January 29, 2007 05:29 PM. Thanks. Your stuff is pretty good too, I'm still reading. And by reading, I mean other stuff. I do sincerely hope you pump out more stuff too. ... Click here to view this comment.

#242. Posted on January 29, 2007 04:49 PM. Okay, since this post is pretty much to redirect attention, you mind giving us a yell about the selection results for the moderator candidates? ... Click here to view this comment.