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The following are documents submitted by this user:

#	Document	Channel
1	Bane Preview	Fan Art
2	Bane	Fiction
3	Bane 10: Hero's Legacy	Fiction
4	Bane 11: A New Beginning	Fiction
5	Bane 12: Hero's Awakening	Fiction
6	Bane 13: The Anomaly	Fiction
7	Bane 14: Revelations	Fiction
8	Bane 15: Escape from Tarsonis	Fiction
9	Bane 16: Fate's Intervention	Fiction
10	Bane 2: Return to Tarsonis	Fiction
11	Bane 3: Noble Sacrafice	Fiction
12	Bane 4: To Free a Hero	Fiction
13	Bane 5: The Rebels of Char	Fiction
14	Bane 6: Rise of Chaos	Fiction
15	Bane 7: Vile Betrayal	Fiction
16	Bane 8: Bad gets Worse	Fiction
17	Bane 9: Calm Before The Storm	Fiction
18	Before Bane: Hero's Origin	Fiction
19	Cerebrate-Marine	Fiction
20	Cerebrate-Marine (Revised Version)	Fiction

The following are comments posted by this user:

#1. Posted on July 02, 2008 03:05 AM. My most sincere gratitude goes out to all who have read; and I can only hope we all meet again in time for the next Bane! And you're very welcome, alpha. If I'm not mistaken, I believe I recall your screen name from ages long past-great to see you again. ... Click here to view this comment.

#2. Posted on June 30, 2008 02:30 AM. good one, huh? ... Click here to view this comment.

#3. Posted on June 28, 2008 03:01 PM. Ah yes, nostalgia...memories of the past are irreplaceable bits of treasure that one carries, but can they can cause as much pain as they can happiness. ... Click here to view this comment.

#4. Posted on June 23, 2008 09:03 PM. Dragging in around comment 15, I am predictably late once more, but hey; I can't show up early, that would be uncharacteristic of me. Anywhoo, sorry I haven't gone back and read the previous installments yet, but my list of pieces to read is 5 miles long. However, I still got to this one; surely I get at least half a brownie-point for the effort? On a more serious note, it was a great read. Like the good doc said, very original; a nice break from the usual bug-blaster. Perhaps I'll re-review ... Click here to view this comment.

#5. Posted on June 08, 2008 08:34 AM. Surprise, surprise; its your ole' pal deadfast! ...Well, probably not, given our history, but meh I say! Let's have a look-see here anyway. Somewhat longer than the usual piece these days, this one took a little time to finish, but it was worth the read. I somewhat agree with smasher in that the story type seems to be a bit on the 'its been done' side, but for someone who's been doing the same series for five years, who am I to speak of cliche's? Anywhoo, the grammar and technicality depart ... Click here to view this comment.

#6. Posted on June 04, 2008 05:56 AM. My apologies for taking so long, but, finally, I return. Lets see here; no literal sound effects, the numbers are all spelled out, the dialog has bits breaking it up the conversation-I think we have a definitive improvement! Like mranderson said, its still important to seperate pov's, which you did most of the time. I didn't have trouble seeing the change myself, but its always a good idea to leave a marker there. And again as zerg mentioned, so many characters can be difficult to keep t ... Click here to view this comment.

#7. Posted on June 04, 2008 05:25 AM. However late I am, the rituals of moving are now over and, as an added bonus, dsl is available in my new area. Still not the fastest, but 2 megs is better than 50k any time. Anywhoo, enough of my rambling; time now to read Infested Man... I could tell, by the end of the piece, that this was more like a prologue to the rest of the story, but it was still good. Very little in the line of grammatical errors; the only problem I saw was a few missing or extra words here or there, but it was never ... Click here to view this comment.

#8. Posted on May 17, 2008 08:39 AM. I somewhat agree with thefirewarriors; the technical terms are rather thick with all the talk of genomes, proteins and enzymes but, now that you've fixed the tense problems from last time; it was still well written enough that I managed to pick it up anyway. However, you may still want to tone down the technicalities just a notch, it may be turning some readers away. Despite that, however, I still enjoyed it! Very interesting plot line, and the background on Yazzu's situation really helps to ... Click here to view this comment.

#9. Posted on May 16, 2008 12:22 PM. Find where? I'd like to see proof of that statement, myself. ... Click here to view this comment.

#10. Posted on May 14, 2008 06:15 PM. Thanks a lot hydra! I noticed that you also went back and read Chapter 1. Interesting to note; you're looking at 5 years difference between Bane 1 and Bane 16 ... Click here to view this comment.

#11. Posted on May 14, 2008 06:04 PM. Ah, so the third chapter is out already? And for me? Very flattering; I've never been a favorite reviewer Starting from the top with technicalities, Grammar and punctuation was better yet again, showing new improvement; you seem to be developing a writing style. One thing though, try to avoid using numbers in the text; "...Right now, it read about 1.5 hours later since..." Unless its a huge number, it's best to spell numbers out; I'm not entirely sure why, its just one of t ... Click here to view this comment.

#12. Posted on May 12, 2008 09:03 PM. Alrighty, who's next in line? Ah yes, The Fighting Fifth... Like thefirewarriors mentioned, good introduction and the action scenes, despite some lack of detail beforehand, were put together well. Props for the joke: "Man, I don't nknow how you can smoke those, they have to be an acquired taste." Max grinned again, "Like Davis's mother." lol! A little retro, yet tastefully executed; I didn't see it coming-good stuff! Unfortunately, many simple grammar mistakes ... Click here to view this comment.

#13. Posted on May 12, 2008 08:26 PM. *Suddenly, deadfast comes crashing in through one wall with scythes reared high, bringing them down on a whole mob of non-reader's that narrowly cornered thefirewarriors* Fear not, for you're not alone in your battle! Fan fiction shall never fall so long as the immortal deadfast is has a blade in the matter! ... Click here to view this comment.

#14. Posted on May 12, 2008 03:43 AM. heh heh, the corpse chucking wasn't really a problem; it was pretty funny-I wouldn't take it out. ... Click here to view this comment.

#15. Posted on May 11, 2008 11:44 AM. I know I sound like a broken record, but the intention is just the same; Thank you for reading PT32, InfestedTerran and Jake! And PT and InfestedTerran, don't forget to drop me a line when you finish new additions to your own series'; I'll be sure to come by and return the favors. Good to see you around, too, Jake; since your last comment back in October, I wasn't sure if you were coming back or not. ... Click here to view this comment.

#16. Posted on May 11, 2008 11:37 AM. Am late, but I suppose late is better than never, so, let us have a look-see... Grammar needs a little polish, but there's note much worth picking about except for some odd sentence structure in some places: "...The dropship lay smoking quietly within the crater, it's body wrenched into an awkwardly bent position, the rear was sticking out of the edge of the crater, the cockpit end, was somewhere underground..." "...Brett surveyed the landscape outside the dropship, dark, ... Click here to view this comment.

#17. Posted on May 07, 2008 02:56 PM. Ashamed? Ashamded?! Good grief, man! What on earth would make you say that? Did you steal it or something? I've noticed that this is your first fiction piece on Starcraft.org, if I'm not mistaken, and let me start by saying that most writers here, myself included, would all but kill to have a first work turn out so well done; any exaggeration aside. The storyline has been done before in many similar works, but seldom few to the degree of quality that I have found here. The grammar is spot ... Click here to view this comment.

#18. Posted on May 07, 2008 02:08 PM. Ah, so the new fiction list still lives! I was starting to wonder when we would get some new works in. Now, let us see here... Not bad at all; The plot seems pretty interesting so far. Warp rays, though? Must be a Starcraft 2 technology; I don't keep up with the happenings of the new game as I should. Most of the technicalities, such as grammar and spelling, went through without much of a hitch, but in this department is this work's main flaw; The tense. I noticed that, at many points, the ... Click here to view this comment.

#19. Posted on May 05, 2008 06:13 PM. Hello again, PT32; didn't take you long to come out with this addition. Let's see what we have... This one seems to have improved some over the first one. The use of "literal words for sound effects" as mentioned in my last review has been amended (theres a term for those type of words, but I can't remember it for the life of me now). Grammar was better this time around too, but it was still missing comma's in a few places, or simply had them in the wrong place. The vocabulary seems ... Click here to view this comment.

#20. Posted on May 05, 2008 05:05 PM. Not a whole lot to point out on this piece; The grammar quality wasn't bad; the vocabulary needed a little work, but it wasn't overly repetitious. However, I don't recommend using so many capitol letters, especially at the beginning, it tends to repel people. I somewhat agree with Jello, the beginning is somewhat confusing as to exactly what time this is until someone mentioned a dropship(I think the "excel sheets" threw it off the most. Thats a current day program; surely it would ... Click here to view this comment.

#21. Posted on May 04, 2008 06:46 AM. Indeed, this site is nearly as immortal as myself. Starcraft 2 is only going to flood this place with untold numbers of new new visitors and material, not bring it to an end. Afterall, Starcraft.org is still Blizzard's official, authorized map site. ... Click here to view this comment.

#22. Posted on May 04, 2008 06:36 AM. Thanks again, Doc and Arhcaon! I know what you mean Doc, I get a little carried away with the comma's sometimes. I'll try to do something different for it next time around. I'm not as current with the new fiction lists as I should be, so don't forget to drop me a line when you submit your new piece, Doc. And hey-hey! Even if its just for a day or so, a Bane chapter hasn't made it to the top of the list in years(Since Bane 10). *deadfast pops the cork on a fresh bottle and hands out drinks. ... Click here to view this comment.

#23. Posted on May 03, 2008 12:20 PM. Probably so, broodbuddy. And what the hay-I registered an account, too. At least now when my last copy of Broodwar finally turns to dust and they don't sell them in stores, I can still get a new one. ... Click here to view this comment.

#24. Posted on April 30, 2008 02:53 PM. Thanks a heap for reading, Rich, Ling and Guardian. And the whole series in a week, Ling? Most impressive! I hope season 1 wasn't too rudimentary for you; I have yet to rewrite it (And I will, complete with reworked and added scenes-a must read!) As for the current recession in the overall Starcraft population; it's only a matter of time before Blizzard finishes the sequel and we're up to our eyeballs in new peeps again. As for your question, Rich, yes; Fanfiction.net is updated with the lat ... Click here to view this comment.

#25. Posted on April 28, 2008 01:52 PM. He IS back : P ... Click here to view this comment.

#26. Posted on April 26, 2008 11:13 PM. Phew! When I read grave news, I thought there was somekind of big plot-hole I left unfilled somewhere-don't scare me like that! Anywhoo-thanks for dropping by smasher and for the heads up. However, I'm all too aware of the dramatic new lull that the starcraft.org reader population has sadly declined to. Long before Bane 16 was finished, I checked through the past readers myself and found only a meager one or two still active within even the past year, give or take a few months. Having bee ... Click here to view this comment.

#27. Posted on April 25, 2008 02:58 PM. A comment? How about a review? I know what you mean, the population of the fiction readers these days leaves something to be desired. Anywhoo, let's have a look at your work... The length wasn't a problem; didn't take long to get through it, but the way the action part with the tank thing was written is somewhat confusing. Try to avoid using literal words for sound effects; instead replace it with action and description-it helps to keep the events flowing. It was difficult to tell sometimes w ... Click here to view this comment.

#28. Posted on April 25, 2008 02:55 PM. Wait a minute, these characters are familiar...Have I read the first part before? .... Well-so wonders never cease. Wow, it seems it took you just as long to finish this sequel as I took for mine, however, it was worth the wait. Again, as before, you've painted a top-tier picture of your new characters despite the chapters modest length, and we got extra background on Jennings and his connection with 'Scythe' as well-great stuff. The bit about the trick Mathew's uses to get Scales to exercise ... Click here to view this comment.

#29. Posted on April 25, 2008 02:54 PM. Even though I havnt read the previous pieces, I thought I'd swing by and repay the favor; so let's see here... Hmm, I'm actually at a loss for words on this one; your writing has excellent vocabulary and the plot, from what I’m able to put together from this single installment, seems nice and original, but the writing itself suffers from the constant bombardment of technical numbers and statistics; there’s so much about exactly how many hundreds of a second passed and other information that i ... Click here to view this comment.

#30. Posted on April 23, 2008 04:06 AM. Me? Dead? impossible! I wouldn't be the immortal deadfast if I died By the way, Bane 16 is finally complete now ... Click here to view this comment.

#31. Posted on April 06, 2008 12:39 PM. I can't help it... I am the one and only immortal deadfast ... Click here to view this comment.

#32. Posted on January 11, 2008 03:38 AM. I would offer some helpful advice and tactics, but all I know is the fastest map-good luck! ... Click here to view this comment.

#33. Posted on December 27, 2007 03:22 AM. ".... And Protogod." lol! ... Click here to view this comment.

#34. Posted on December 27, 2007 03:17 AM. Elite Fiction reopening? I wasn't aware that it was missing (well, part of it is, but I'll not make it personal), I'll side with crazy old guy's assumption that it is to become active again-which would be good. ... Click here to view this comment.

#35. Posted on December 17, 2007 02:55 AM. May your new journey be a prosperous one! And when you get to whatever place it is that retired moderators go, say 'hi' to BSTRhino for us. ... Click here to view this comment.

#36. Posted on November 27, 2007 04:19 AM. *strains senses for a glimpse of the new hydralisk Hmmm... didn't see one. They're probably saving the best for last; however, its great that there is renewed possibility for zerg information in the next few weeks. I'm compelled to exclaim "Yippee!" ... Click here to view this comment.

#37. Posted on November 08, 2007 07:06 PM. Heh heh, not a problem; I never said there was anything wrong with a pg-13 rating. Entertaining reality doesn't come sugar coated : P You said you spent a lot of time on your characters, and it shows in the finished product-keep up the good work. ... Click here to view this comment.

#38. Posted on November 08, 2007 12:24 PM. I agree with mranderson and darkslaya; the aspect of this work that shines the brightest is the portrayal of your characters. Even though the piece is relatively short, a core image of the main character is well painted for the reader. The description and flow of the action scene in the beginning is nicely done too; the vocabulary creates a colorful picture of the action, yet it was easy to understand. Grammatically speaking, there's not much to speak of. Only minor typos here and there, and, ... Click here to view this comment.

#39. Posted on November 01, 2007 06:17 PM. Actually, Chuck Norris has been dead for years; Death's just too big of a pansy to tell him. ... Click here to view this comment.

#40. Posted on November 01, 2007 05:13 AM. Indeed, because when Chuck Norris does a push-up, he doesn't push himself up, he pushes the world down. ... Click here to view this comment.

#41. Posted on October 30, 2007 05:16 AM. Of course they bleed; otherwise it would be nearly impossible to write an R rated fight scene with them. And I just realized that they call the exploding zerglings 'Banelings'- who woulda' guessed? ... Click here to view this comment.

#42. Posted on September 30, 2007 11:33 AM. Meh I say! Flashy ships and high-end weaponry have never been much more than a speed bump to the zerg, and I'm confident that history will surely repeat itself. ... Click here to view this comment.

#43. Posted on September 16, 2007 09:34 AM. Not too shabby for a first piece, albeit short, but you mentioned that the length is intentional, thus it isn't an issue here. However, I you were to rewrite this, I would suggest filling in the gaps left in the beginning with the zergling. Namely, the part where the ling and it's buddies attack the first Terran base, but I'm not going to nag any further into specifics; Detective got to it first : P. Anywhoo, the overall plot is good, and it doesn't lack much description; in some spots, it wa ... Click here to view this comment.

#44. Posted on July 25, 2007 03:55 AM. I like it; the menu on the right brings back memories of the old vintage site before the big new years crash of some-odd years ago. Also, once I've loaded a page once, it now reloads much faster; a real plus for us still running on smoke-signal modems. Contrary to popular opinion, though, I also see the lists on the right as an improvement; the extra space makes it easier on the eyes. ... Click here to view this comment.

#45. Posted on July 16, 2007 04:01 AM. No fancy warp ray or flashy war machine can convince me; my money's still on the zerg. ... Click here to view this comment.

#46. Posted on June 11, 2007 01:53 PM. "Where the [Verbal Abuse] am I?!" the immortal deadfast snarled, "This isn't the opening night to Pooty-tang in space!" The hydralisk notices Barney charging at him for the kill, or to administer a friendly hug; both of which are life-threatening. "Hmmm...It seems that I don't have much choice except to take action." Awaiting the lumbering, fuzzy dinosaur unflinchingly, our Hero stays any attack until the moment is right. "I WUV hugs'n friends!&quot ... Click here to view this comment.

#47. Posted on May 31, 2007 09:56 PM. ...Without warning, the seams of the pfr universe were ripped open as it slid off the end of the fiction lists and began its inevitable plunge into the dark abyss of the void... Meanwhile, back on the rocket-powered mecha-bunny... "I told you before, Kerrie'," deadfast growled, "Use Haladras's Visa card; we havn't blown the limit on it yet!" Just then, the rocket-powered mecha-bunny crashed headlong into the great emp pulse that ravaged across the universe, signalin ... Click here to view this comment.

#48. Posted on May 27, 2007 09:00 PM. "Hmmm, I see your point. We could turn around and fly back if you wish; I'm sure they have a whole other regime gathered up, waiting for revenge the next time we stop by. Who knows? Kerrigan chased us, maybe you'll get lucky and they're following us right now." ... Click here to view this comment.

#49. Posted on May 27, 2007 07:44 AM. Looks of confusion and murmurs of disbelief passed through the squadron as the bunny-troopers looked up from their super-soaker sights, not sure what to believe. "Go ahed, chek teh site," SS assured. "If you're lying," The bunny commander said coldly, "you'll be the first one to be sent back to the flames!" The bunny commander put one paw to its headset and the Bunny troopers fell silent, "Candytail! Gimme a confirmation on this." A static-r ... Click here to view this comment.

#50. Posted on May 26, 2007 03:21 PM. ...an even bigger mecha-bunny, followed by a dozen more just like it. Having been deprived of their first line of defense, the evil crapping bunnies called in reinforcements to help even the odds. The giant mecha-bunnies sported revolving laser cannons in their eye-sockets and massive chain-saw arms. To make things worse, the giant mecha-bunnies also came packing, just like their small, living cousins. Hatches on their butts opened, and legions of armored bunny-troopers marched out carrying supe ... Click here to view this comment.

#51. Posted on May 25, 2007 11:39 PM. "You!" the immortal deadfast growled, "I thought I gave that goof Binks an extra quarter to keep you in hell with dmapmaker....screw it! I'll take the leftover's home with me; the misses'l make sandwiches out of it in the morning-welcome aboard!" (/random humor) "You cooked my horse?!" SSa croaked, turning pale. "By the way," deadfast ignored the question, turning to highdefiler, "Great work back there with the laser pointer, it fooled Kerrigan ... Click here to view this comment.

#52. Posted on May 22, 2007 10:49 PM. "Hmm," Kerrigan grinned, "It's about time you idiots started appreciating my quality service!" Kerrigan picked up a single bill from the massive stack and whipped out one of those special black markers and drew a line on the dollar. Unfortunately for our Hero's, the cloned dollars all had the same serial numbers on them. As a result, they failed the marker test with flying colors. Naturally, Kerrigan was greatly enraged, "It's all a bunch of funny-money!! BROODS! C ... Click here to view this comment.

#53. Posted on May 21, 2007 11:39 AM. 449mbs?! Great-googly-moogly! That would take my comp days to download ... Click here to view this comment.

#54. Posted on May 21, 2007 10:00 AM. "WHY are you STILL eating those?" deadfast asked out loud to no one in particular as everyone in the group of Hero's continued to order more butt-dogs. "I can't help it; her sales pitch was so catchy!" Haladras answered between bites. deadfast shakes his heavily armored hydralisk head and speaks low to himself, "...At least it's not spontaneous crapping..." "What was that, dead?" one of clone's clones asked while standing in line, "Something ... Click here to view this comment.

#55. Posted on May 20, 2007 11:11 PM. Appearing without warning via dimensional rift, the immortal deadfast returns to the scene, "Comment 120 should be far enough in the future to get past all that crapping crap; and luck willing, they'll be none the wiser about me bending the rules alittle to get..." deadfast notices that everyone's dead and gone and the universe is aflame, "...here..." "Un(CENSORED AGAIN: you know why)believable!" the hydralisk snarled, carapace charring in the constant, ... Click here to view this comment.

#56. Posted on May 19, 2007 09:51 AM. Excellent! It seems blizzard has more brains than I thought, either that or some Korean held them at gunpoint...aside from the initial excitement, I wonder how long it will be before its actually ready? ... Click here to view this comment.

#57. Posted on May 02, 2007 09:52 PM. the poll block thing you're seeing (and I'm seeing it too) is a result of the site moving servers...or something like that. Until they get all the bugs worked out, some parts of the site may be down for awhile. heh heh, everyone's calling it warcrap now...excellent ... Click here to view this comment.

#58. Posted on April 29, 2007 12:07 PM. My apologies if I seem a bit.....short with blizzard; yet one can't ignore the fact that the only news about a new starcraft is still the same hopeless sentence they've been spouting for years whenever someone mentions the possibility of a sequel. And why does the new game have to be so above and beyond? Hell, I would be perfectly happy with just another expansion set and a trio of new units. As another note, it would be impossible for Blizzard to spend 6-7 years creating any game. The best pro ... Click here to view this comment.

#59. Posted on April 28, 2007 09:53 PM. Hog-wash! I'll believe nothing until I'm playing it. Year after year after year, Blizzard has ignored our plea's for a sequel, responding with the same dried-out "we plan to revisit that universe" crap they always have since 1999, and there's about a 98% chance that it will remain like that for all eternity, because Blizzard has become nothing more than an unruly mob of elf-and-orc obsessed vegetables with nothing but the next warcrap expansion on their minds and how much money it will ... Click here to view this comment.

#60. Posted on April 18, 2007 08:27 PM. (Heh heh, I thought it was pretty funny, at least. But hey-I don't have a myspace; I hate that place) ... Click here to view this comment.

#61. Posted on April 18, 2007 01:04 PM. ...return of their third comrade that might somehow help even the go-zillion to two odds. As if on cue, the same energies that hauled the immortal deadfast away made itself known once more, accompanied by the pleading cries of PFR 6's leprechaun in a cheap Irish accent, "No! NOO!! I can't take it anymore! Be gone, you miserable sell-out!" Reappearing just as suddenly as he was taken away, the immortal deadfast was restored to the present, amidst the great paintball golem... ... Click here to view this comment.

#62. Posted on April 16, 2007 09:45 AM. Without prior warning, a Blue Zergling Bus (r) roars to a stop from somewhere offscreen, running down and parking on top of Haladras and Starcraftchamp; where upon the door opens and the immortal deadfast steps off: "Then it looks like I got here just in time..." deadfast trails off as Geckat, Raynor, and the many clones wordlessly stare in confusion of deadfast's uncharacteristically normal entrance. The immortal deadfast speaks up again as the bus pulls off, revealing an unhapp ... Click here to view this comment.

#63. Posted on April 06, 2007 09:24 AM. Heh, it almost looks like you did this with oil paints. Anywhoo, it's not bad-I'm awful at drawing people, but she doesn't look...zerg-ish enough to be Kerrigan. I think its the almost Terran looking body armor and the new dew that throws it off; Like, drifter said, Kerrigan has those spiky, alien dreadlock things for hair. By the way, are you still going to continue The Last Recon? It was good stuff : P ... Click here to view this comment.

#64. Posted on April 01, 2007 06:51 AM. "...And yes, Chuck Norris is invincible. If he ever did get struck by lightning, the world would spontaneously combust. That doesn't even make sense..." naw, he would see it coming and dodge it somehow ... Click here to view this comment.

#65. Posted on April 01, 2007 06:45 AM. I like it-it's the clearest picture of a lurker that I've seen yet. There are some that are closer to photo-realism than this but those all have so much in them that you can't tell where one part of the lurker begins and the other ends. Also, I like the texturing and shading you did on the armored skull part; it has a nice 3-d look. ... Click here to view this comment.

#66. Posted on March 29, 2007 09:03 PM. hmm...the name sounds familiar ... Click here to view this comment.

#67. Posted on March 29, 2007 09:00 AM. heh heh, I remember those great days. At one point, Bane and Spartan117's Bounty Hunter series dominated all but two lowely spots on the popular lists. Sadly, two Bane's haven't officially been on the lists at the same time since the ninth chapter. Anywhoo, I'm sorry to have to report what I did about the length. Though the die-hard fans seem to enjoy the extra length of the new season, it's like kryptonyte to new readers. But fret not; the change will also benefit the Bane-veterans by bringi ... Click here to view this comment.

#68. Posted on March 27, 2007 04:49 PM. Hmm...It appears that I spoke too soon; a mere few hours was all the time it had left. ... Click here to view this comment.

#69. Posted on March 27, 2007 12:28 PM. It appears that, other than the spoof option, a hydralisk is the most popular of the zerg units. Imagine that... Although the occasion practically screams it out, I just can't bring myself to use shameless public advertising to tell these people that they can thoroughly satisfy their fascination with hydralisks, and other popular species of zerg for that matter, by investing some time with a certain, endless, fiction series that is available at this very location. But hey-what do I know? ... Click here to view this comment.

#70. Posted on March 27, 2007 09:47 AM. Thanks for stopping back by, Smiffy-I was starting to wonder if I was going to have any new feedback before Bane 15 quietly slips off the lists. And thanks for the CC (constructive critisism); even when Bane is on a high note, actual tidbits of CC are few and far between. I'm not entirely sure what you mean with the dialouge, but i'll be sure to investigate the said problem to try and ensure that what the characters are saying is more clear and easier to understand. The length of the ... Click here to view this comment.

#71. Posted on March 21, 2007 08:41 AM. heh heh heh, nice pic Looks like Bane finally gave in and agreed on that deal with Kraft. He can be such a sell-out if you can push the price high enough. ... Click here to view this comment.

#72. Posted on March 15, 2007 08:31 AM. Yeh, what they said And are you still working on the next installment to TLR? ... Click here to view this comment.

#73. Posted on March 12, 2007 08:40 AM. I'm not sure; aside from a few loosely planned scenes and a vauge wire frame, I make the series up as I go along. It's much easier to write that way and it makes for a much more interesting and creative storyline than one that has to mechanically follow a preset design. Theoretically, the Bane series will never end-thus is the priceless gift given to me by you; the readers. However, the Bane series IS divided into different seasons. The first season consists of the first ten chapters, but I ... Click here to view this comment.

#74. Posted on March 07, 2007 10:54 AM. niether do I ... Click here to view this comment.

#75. Posted on March 02, 2007 09:42 PM. /me whistles, watching the tumble-weeds go by ... Click here to view this comment.

#76. Posted on February 20, 2007 10:13 AM. Totally outstanding; It's great when someone does a hand-drawn comic like this. 'REALLY makes me wish I could draw all over again. I havn't seen one like this since that lurker comic a few months back. Exceptional beyond any doubt, you MUST continue. ... Click here to view this comment.

#77. Posted on February 20, 2007 09:59 AM. Fret not about the length; Bane can take care of the thirty-pagers. 'Good to see your return. I agree with the others; the pilot-talk seems authentic and well done, and the individual sarcastic remarks from the pilots added a nice layer of believability, despite the short time we are exposed to the characters. The mini-introduction at the start was entertaining, too. 'Couldn't find anything significant in terms of gramatical flaws or other technicalities. The storyline suffers alittle fro ... Click here to view this comment.

#78. Posted on February 19, 2007 09:57 AM. I'm not exactly sure, smasher, how one developes what I like to call 'super-fans', but it might have something to do with the highly concentrated addictive energies woven into the fiber of every Bane chapter. Actually, Reece DOES teach Bane to read (in the next chapter of course, you just hear about it at the end of this one), but it's not going to become a central theme of Bane's character, like Telia's obsession with poetry. I'm going to use the reading thing as a simple, yet affective mech ... Click here to view this comment.

#79. Posted on February 18, 2007 09:48 PM. I believe you're referring to my old friend, spartan117, and his Bounty Hunter series. By the way; other than the fact that its really late and I should have finished it sooner, does anyone have something to say about the chapter itself? Questions? Comments? Complaints? ... Click here to view this comment.

#80. Posted on February 15, 2007 09:55 AM. As per your request, I have come to leave my critique... Overall, this peice is written excellently, but I find myself with mixed feelings over it. Grammatically, it's practically flawless, and the vocabulary is so vast and varied that it makes one wonder how many thesuaruses you must own. Yet, this fact also seems to be the work's biggest problem. For protoss dialoug, theres all the merit in the world to use the big stuff, because one would think they're naturally brainy, however, I agree wi ... Click here to view this comment.

#81. Posted on February 13, 2007 10:23 AM. ...maybe...or maybe I'm simply alittle slow on the draw sometimes...or possibly I DO lack manners and simply waited until you noticed my failure to leave a review before correcting my actions...Anywhoo Despite my lack of knowledge of previous chapters, this peice by itself seems to be well done. I managed to pick up a sizeable amount of information about the overall plot just from this chapter alone; which is a good thing. The dialoug is put together very nicely, with subtile actions and exp ... Click here to view this comment.

#82. Posted on February 12, 2007 10:16 AM. Indeed, the flow of comments for Bane is barely a trickle in comparison to even the last installment. When I first started writing Bane, it suffered from the same problem, so I created a compilation of the first 3 chapters under a slightly different name; A Hydralisk Named Bane: The Bane Series. That seemed to do the trick; I think once people got the idea that this "Bane" was a hydralisk, the story's main character, then they were much more inclined to read. I'm not sure if I can/ ... Click here to view this comment.

#83. Posted on February 01, 2007 01:01 PM. Unexpected rebirth? heh heh heh I'm not the immortal deadfast for nothing ... Click here to view this comment.

#84. Posted on January 30, 2007 06:41 AM. Heh heh, looks like Mengsk II is a nervous wreck after what happened to his father, even though a shotgun isn't quite as tramatizing as mysteriously being thrown out of his 40th floor office window (By the way, you could have used that little tidbit if you wanted) Anywhoo, the piece is pretty sound, gramatically speaking, and the descriptions were very vivid. All I could find in terms of flaws was a missing word here or there, and, occasionally, some words were used alittle oddly: ".. ... Click here to view this comment.

#85. Posted on January 27, 2007 04:39 AM. Indeed, it looks pretty menacing; I think even Bane would stop and think "WTF?!" upon first sight of this thing. ... Click here to view this comment.

#86. Posted on January 18, 2007 04:53 AM. yeah, I like it too. The color gives the comments a luster they didn't have before; it's more...Starcraft-ish. ... Click here to view this comment.

#87. Posted on January 17, 2007 07:01 AM. Fat chance...I'll believe it when I'm buying it ... Click here to view this comment.

#88. Posted on January 11, 2007 03:45 PM. The choice of a hydralisk would be an easy pick, but given the available options, Zeratul could use his cloak for some wicked party tricks. ... Click here to view this comment.

#89. Posted on October 18, 2006 01:21 AM. Starcraft based art sold on T-shirts by a different company other than Blizzard...hmmm..How'd you guys get that one passed the company's offense-line of high-paid lawyers? And sorry peeps- refunds are not available on the Bane Series* sports mug. *Copyright of Immortal Industries; 2003-2006 ... Click here to view this comment.

#90. Posted on October 04, 2006 07:11 AM. Actually, I'm nearly finished. If we're lucky, Bane 15: Escape from Tarsonis, should hit the lists sometime this week. I'll see what can be done to make Bane sound less human in his dialoug, but since he's spent most of his conscious time in human company, that may prove to be difficult in some situations. On a lighter note, I'm elated that you read and reviewed the newest chapter, and I look forward to your review of 15(when it comes out). Thanks for reading! ... Click here to view this comment.

#91. Posted on September 28, 2006 03:43 AM. I don't think many new players are buying the battle chests; its simply a wave of peeps with broken disks. I've lost count of how many copies of starcraft I've bought over the years. Seems if you play them enough, or have destructive sibblings, one goes through many copies of a favorite game. ... Click here to view this comment.

#92. Posted on August 31, 2006 02:13 PM. I was hoping that one of these new developments wouldn't be something about warcraft; because what is there possibly left to do with the subject? But now this! A blasted warcraft movie....I should have known... I'm convinced that Blizzard would make more money if they send a represenative down here to stand behind a booth and sell smacks upside his thick skull to the masses of disgruntled starcraft fans. ... Click here to view this comment.

#93. Posted on August 29, 2006 03:29 PM. On the contary, that depends on the situation. If you were fighting a mass of archons for some reason, zerglings would be an example of the wrong unit ....blasted typos ... Click here to view this comment.

#94. Posted on August 26, 2006 11:52 AM. Until I see some box art, a few trailers, and a release date, it's all a bunch of hot air and paper-thin letters to me. ... Click here to view this comment.

#95. Posted on August 05, 2006 09:39 PM. Sorry about the long waits, doctor oc; however, since you asked, I'm happy to report that production should be complete in a few weeks at the very most. If you wish, I could pm you alittle preview, if you feel the wait is too much. ... Click here to view this comment.

#96. Posted on August 05, 2006 06:35 AM. heh heh Yaknow, that's the most common way peeps mispell my name ... Click here to view this comment.

#97. Posted on August 03, 2006 03:29 AM. Did someone say Bane? ... Click here to view this comment.

#98. Posted on July 16, 2006 05:51 PM. Greetings, Archaon. My apologies for the late review, but I suppose late is better than never. Anywhoo, the plot was easily defined in the prologue, although it seemed to be more of what had happened to Goren's mother than how the character got to the exact events in the beginning of chapter one. For the mostpart, vocabulary usage was fair; in some places it played out well, and then, in others, the text showed some repetition. Dialoug, in terms of the pilot's professionalism, was well po ... Click here to view this comment.

#99. Posted on July 12, 2006 02:37 PM. Aha! I thought something was amiss; you snuck in a new piece while I wasn't looking, I see. 'Probably would have noticed it earlier, but the name threw me a few days off. Although you stated that this work is more of a departure from your usual "shootem-ups", I find it to be more like an extensive prequel to one of the the usual. However, this doesn't mean, even in the least, that it wasn't well done. The quality of this piece rivals that of your Exile series in terms of overall me ... Click here to view this comment.

#100. Posted on July 04, 2006 04:09 AM. Hey, what's all the hub-bub abo.... It's complete with squads of hydralisks, outstanding work! ... Click here to view this comment.

#101. Posted on June 29, 2006 05:32 PM. hmm, were to start? spose a list of the basics would do For the most part, the spelling and grammar wasn't bad, considering it was written on wordpad. There were a few places where words or punctuation were missing, but it didn't make the read a difficult one. The dialoug seemed a bit forced at times, and, depending on the age of the kids in the beggining, their choice of vocabulary was alittle ranged. In most instances, you would think that the bully would sound alittle dumber, considerin ... Click here to view this comment.

#102. Posted on May 28, 2006 07:35 PM. *without warning, the dimensional rift crackles anew and deadfast's head pokes through the chaotic, swirling energy, "What the?!...Oh-my mistake; wrong number..." *the dimensional rift returns to it's former state as deadfast vanishes again. ... Click here to view this comment.

#103. Posted on May 14, 2006 09:05 PM. The Protoss now, huh? That's good news; I'll get to chose a hydralisk on the next poll for sure ... Click here to view this comment.

#104. Posted on May 13, 2006 06:12 AM. Going on year 4 and chapter 15 at this point in time; Thinking of the past always brings about a powerful feeling of nostalgia for me. ... Click here to view this comment.

#105. Posted on April 19, 2006 12:22 PM. I like uberlisk's idea, I would have voted for that And you asked the new poll question the wrong way. Do should be Does in the question "Do Blizzard hate Jim Raynor?" ... Click here to view this comment.

#106. Posted on April 17, 2006 02:36 PM. Voting for a review board member with the Poll system would be a total flop; Since when have the wishes of the general Starcraft.org public and what is actually best for them been one-in-the-same? ... Click here to view this comment.

#107. Posted on April 01, 2006 10:59 AM. BurgerCraft? Even I can sense that this is a joke ... Click here to view this comment.

#108. Posted on March 28, 2006 11:00 AM. I've come to the conclusion many years ago that another sequel to starcraft will never be released at all. Blizzard is far too busy goofing around in their twisted, done-to-death world of elves and orcs to spend any more effort on the subject of Starcraft beyond simply repeating something along the oh-so-familiar lines of... "...While there are no current developments on a sequel to starcraft, we do plan to revisit that universe one day..." ... Click here to view this comment.

#109. Posted on March 22, 2006 04:21 AM. You ARE making another one of these, right? ... Click here to view this comment.

#110. Posted on March 22, 2006 03:44 AM. You know me; I enjoyed it ... Click here to view this comment.

#111. Posted on March 20, 2006 06:26 AM. Not a bad intro, I can't for the life of me get html to work right so I've given up using italics. My only beef with it is the fact that forty-eight hydralisk spines is a bit much; that many could tear a tank apart. The story has a few points where some added description of the setting and the action could have benefited, but the plot itself was rather straight forward; easy to follow for a first chapter. The action of the story flowed well and didn't linger on any one part, but the introduc ... Click here to view this comment.

#112. Posted on March 08, 2006 03:53 AM. Back when Bane was still brand new material, DFIK used to be a big Bane fan, as was virtually everyone else at the time, and he seemed to like my writing so much that he created his screen name after me. DFIK deadfast is kool the K throws alotta peeps off; heh heh. This is, at least, what I have been told that it stands for. ... Click here to view this comment.

#113. Posted on March 06, 2006 03:50 AM. heh heh, I didn't say anything And plus, you having nothing to fear. I found out the hard way that my blades cannot harm others through the computer monitor; the even was actually quite costly on my behalf. event* blasted typos :/ ... Click here to view this comment.

#114. Posted on March 05, 2006 06:18 AM. Wow, I had totally forgotten about this piece. It's actually been years since I've visited it. I know, the events of this peice are pretty far out of step with the rest of the series and the first moments of Bane 1, I've been meaning to rewrite it for ages. Bane is, in fact, a battle-hardened creature at that beginning of Bane 1, he simply doesnt remember it, as he was under Kerrigan's control, just like any other zerg, until she shared her mind with the creature and gave it the ability to speak ... Click here to view this comment.

#115. Posted on March 05, 2006 06:09 AM. They do get longer as they go on, I believe, but the changes in length are nothing until you reach Bane 10. I do hope, despite the length, that you continue your reading vigil. I thrive on feedback And thanks raynor; I'm very happy that you found the piece to be worth the read If you're curious, Bane was actually part of the Elite fiction at one time. Thanks for reading, everyone ... Click here to view this comment.

#116. Posted on February 26, 2006 02:40 PM. Thanks for the feedback! I've been planning on rewriting the first season of the Bane series, so hopefully most of the problems you mentioned and many others will be repaired in the new version. The anonymous comments are some of those that remain from before the site crashed and reopened. It was quite sad, actually, because there were roughly double the comments and reviews for each chapter of the first season before the crash. Once the new site was up, the system seemed to have lost the scr ... Click here to view this comment.

#117. Posted on February 26, 2006 12:27 PM. Odd...where is everyone? ... Click here to view this comment.

#118. Posted on February 24, 2006 04:47 PM. Incredible! At long last, an original, hand drawn starcraft comic! I commend you; totally outstanding work It's already been said countless times, but who cares? You deserve to hear it again anyway; the level of realism in the drawing is perfect for this style of comic; from the way you created the action parts to the character's expressions-the entire peice works flawlessly. For the first time in my writing career here at starcraft.org, I, myself have become a Fan of a fan-work. It's pre ... Click here to view this comment.

#119. Posted on February 24, 2006 04:21 PM. Wow... four days have come and gone and nobody new has stopped by. Perhaps it is time to rewrite the first season to help get everyone back on the Bane side :b ... Click here to view this comment.

#120. Posted on February 23, 2006 06:21 AM. I thought I sensed something strange...a comment in a place that has not been seen by the light of day for almost a year. A sequel to cerebrate marine? I wish I had time; maybe if I won the lottery and didn't have to work anymore, I could stay home and write in my spare time, as is my want, but until that or the day when I get a different job, I simply dont have the time to write a sequel. Not to mention, theres not exactly a whole lot that I can do with the idea. ... Click here to view this comment.

#121. Posted on February 23, 2006 05:13 AM. Ahh! The long-awaited sequel is finally upon us, and, with only a single flaw, what a sequel it is, as well. *deadfast looks over one shoulder suspicously By the way, you used "Long, tall and ugly"(which was great, IMO) before I could use the planned "Tall, brown and ugly" in my next installment. Odd, that rarly happens to me, good work. Within reading the first two paragraphs, one can see that you put forth an extra effort to create a great diversity in the vocabu ... Click here to view this comment.

#122. Posted on February 21, 2006 03:08 AM. Hmmmm...I can't help sensing that someone is missing... ... Click here to view this comment.

#123. Posted on February 15, 2006 02:52 AM. I searched the document, finding the word "impaled" to be used twice total, but you are sill right; the word was used twice within a paragraph or so of each other. Thanks for bringing this to my attention. One of my goals for the new season is to do everything I can to avoid repetition in the text. Heh heh, and fear not for your scythe swinging hero; 14 chapters later, and he hasn't changed much. I'm sure the ever hungry hydralisk will find another meal in the next chapter or so. ... Click here to view this comment.

#124. Posted on February 14, 2006 03:50 AM. I would not pay to play without the hackers either. To let the truth be known, I would miss them to an extent; its always fun to crush a hacker with my endless swarms and rub the loss in, mentioning, of course, that it was done despite their precious hacks. Heh heh heh....good stuff... ... Click here to view this comment.

#125. Posted on February 14, 2006 03:16 AM. Impressive...that's a first. Can't say that I didn't sense it coming though ... Click here to view this comment.

#126. Posted on February 13, 2006 01:50 PM. ... Click here to view this comment.

#127. Posted on February 10, 2006 02:11 PM. I just noticed this; Kerrigans face on the cover sorta looks like Whoopie Goldberg's, heh heh heh. ... Click here to view this comment.

#128. Posted on February 08, 2006 09:33 PM. heh heh, I'm not quite sure if it can be done, but I'm ever grateful for the reviews never the less Thanks for reading! ... Click here to view this comment.

#129. Posted on February 06, 2006 10:11 AM. Who put that one vote on "Most of the time"? That's right! I did it! You see it here folks; Ima fastest map player, been one for years, and I'm not afraid to say it ... Click here to view this comment.

#130. Posted on February 05, 2006 06:12 PM. Heh heh heh, this one pic made scanning through random peices of fan art totally worth the time. The way you drew the protoss smoking the cigirate like its on the verge of a mental breakdown is totally hilarious. Crabtaster is right; you could easily make this into a hand-drawn starcraft comic simply about a zealot that smokes and a drunken marine; that would be gold! I'd bet that it would make frontpage news after a few episodes, if the humor was good. ... Click here to view this comment.

#131. Posted on February 03, 2006 02:13 AM. Heh heh heh, that would be great, but I don't forsee such an event anytime soon. Just for the record, Geckat is right; there's so much Starcraft related content in the series that I would need Blizzard's complete consent before anything of the sort could happen. I believe you may have gotten this notion from somewhere in the comments sections of the series where I announced that Bane is going to be illustrated; there's a jumbo difference between publication and illustration. ... Click here to view this comment.

#132. Posted on January 22, 2006 04:10 AM. So familiar...yet...so different. I liked it myself, despite the few points of unbelievabilitly that plague it. It's good to know that peeps still mention Bane whenever one of these stories pop up; lets me know that not everything has changed. ... Click here to view this comment.

#133. Posted on January 20, 2006 06:11 PM. Wow, what are the odds someone had the same thoughts for a pole as I did for...meh, you'll all find out when I release the next chapter. I just hope no one thinks that I took the idea. An entirely zerg oriented pole; out standing! A hydralisk is a tempting companion, but since that option isn't directly available, I'm inclined to choose mutalisk as well. ... Click here to view this comment.

#134. Posted on January 18, 2006 10:42 AM. I don't know the odds, but why not go for the gusto anyway? I got $6.50 on 1.13r before summer vacation. ... Click here to view this comment.

#135. Posted on January 15, 2006 01:17 AM. I look forward to the game myself. It has zerg units as playable characters, whats not to love? I think they should have tried alittle harder with the hydralisk depiction though; the shape is okay, but it really lacks visual detail. On a related note; I've read the blizcon or whathaveyou coverage that told of people's experiences with the demo some time back. It appears that they used the same mechanic I did a few years ago when you mix an impaling-happy hydralisk with firebats. ... Click here to view this comment.

#136. Posted on January 10, 2006 10:30 PM. Greetings! I willing to bet that I'm just about the last person you would expect to show up out of the blue and drop a review. The peom's atmosphere seems kinda grim right from the beginning, but obviously a happy ending wasn't what you where going for. The rhyming was well done, the only sounded thing that sounded forced in a few spots was where some lines had too many syllables, but I'm not really one to judge peotry; having never even thought about writing some of my own. If you were to ... Click here to view this comment.

#137. Posted on January 08, 2006 05:40 AM. So I was drawn here two weeks after christmas for some unapparent reason...go figure. While I'm here, might as well review somthing. Anywho, the peom wasn't bad at all. Alittle choppy in some places where ryhming somewhat sounded forced but the ending made up for it; "But still it's christmas, do not fret. You may be soon, but you're not dead yet." Sounds alot like the olden language; Good work. ... Click here to view this comment.

#138. Posted on January 08, 2006 05:27 AM. At long last, a new addition to the elite fiction section! I may go so far as to cheer "Yay!" Indeed, what can be said that already hasn't by so many? Nice work, Protogod. ... Click here to view this comment.

#139. Posted on December 20, 2005 10:39 AM. A hydralisk isn't an option in the poll; how disappointing! Ah well, there are actually many things I'd like to have much more than a hydralisk anyway-who would have guessed? ... Click here to view this comment.

#140. Posted on December 18, 2005 07:44 AM. What was the prize for first place? I suppose I should have joined. I'da dominated the competition in my hydralisk form; although, once they asked to see the winner's face for the pictures, I would have had some difficulty "removing" the costume. ... Click here to view this comment.

#141. Posted on December 15, 2005 07:17 AM. I mean no ill intentions when I ask this, but what happened to using comments from the poll when posting the results? They were pretty interesting to read, or at least I thought as such. ... Click here to view this comment.

#142. Posted on December 11, 2005 10:10 PM. You have? I await your reviews with much aniticipation! ... Click here to view this comment.

#143. Posted on December 06, 2005 10:08 PM. Adding to what was said by my three predicessors, APM is simply a numeric measurment and merely guages a players skill to a certain point. I do believe it is one of many tools newbies could use to improve their skill, though; Upon scoring a very low APM, the said player may then be inspired to improve their speed. Being fast may help you, but if your skill with the blade is not in step with your speed, you may be speeding your way to a definite defeat. I have an average APM, usually between ... Click here to view this comment.

#144. Posted on December 02, 2005 12:14 PM. Hey; its got the zerg as playably characters-It's got alittle something going for it. All they need to lock in their success would be seperate 1st person campaigns for each race. ... Click here to view this comment.

#145. Posted on November 30, 2005 11:27 AM. lol ... Click here to view this comment.

#146. Posted on November 29, 2005 10:06 PM. E-gad! ...mortals... ... Click here to view this comment.

#147. Posted on November 27, 2005 04:05 PM. I suppose cloaking would be the most helpful; imagine how easy it would be to every bank in town! By the way, you missed one; I'd much rather have the ability to transform into a lurker. ... Click here to view this comment.

#148. Posted on November 15, 2005 09:32 PM. The work is not mine, but the artist is working on an illustration project for the Bane series; this drawing was a sample of her work that she originally sent to me and I payed an undisclosed amount to have it rightfully displayed online. I have the artists written(well, typed actually) permission to post it here under my account name, so long as I don't claim the work to be mine and I leave due citation to the actual illustrator, and I met both requirements. ... Click here to view this comment.

#149. Posted on November 08, 2005 03:24 PM. Hmmm...doesn't really seem logical to me, but I have no doubt that such a theory exists. Maybe its possible but theres always that chance that you would just slam into a planet at an incredible rate, instantly destroying your ship and killing everyone onboard. It would look pretty cool as a bystander on the planet though, sorta like a plane crash, except that the plane hits the ground at about the same speed lighting does ... Click here to view this comment.

#150. Posted on November 08, 2005 09:43 AM. heh heh, what a coincidence-I just bought Space Balls from walmart the other day because I saw it in the $5 bin. And uhhh, the same princible applies to just about any speed, even plaid. ... Click here to view this comment.

#151. Posted on November 07, 2005 10:33 PM. I wouldn't worry about the plot hole too much-we all have our shares of them(i.e. A zergling building a fire) But just to add something to the discussion, it all depends on the ship's velocity on whether or not it could have recieved that message. Electronic messages(even today) travel very close to the speed of light. If the ship were moving toward or at an angle of the origin of the message, it would be picked up. If the ship were traveling away from the signal, they would pick it up when t ... Click here to view this comment.

#152. Posted on November 07, 2005 12:43 PM. Ah, at last I got around to reading your work, as requested. Behold, my critique: Although I wasn't familiar with the storyline at first, it was easy to catch up with. The mysterious new earth with its unknown inhabitants draws the reader in and makes you wonder just what happened. The dialogue itself is also well done-the conversations between the characters were easy to read and interpret and, above all, the characters sound authentic. You may want to read over the next piece alittle closer ... Click here to view this comment.

#153. Posted on November 06, 2005 11:58 PM. I don't mind as long as you don't use this image to do it. So long as its your own original drawing of a hydralisk, theres no problem. ... Click here to view this comment.

#154. Posted on November 06, 2005 11:19 AM. You get to control the zerg, too huh? If there is a zerg campaign to it, there may be some hope for Starcraft: Ghost afterall. ... Click here to view this comment.

#155. Posted on October 31, 2005 10:29 PM. I've always wondered....what does BST stand for anyway? ... Click here to view this comment.

#156. Posted on October 31, 2005 09:31 AM. She's been kinda busy for the last month or so-she's been moving to a new house ... Click here to view this comment.

#157. Posted on October 09, 2005 02:43 PM. This won't affect games sales to minors at all, in my opinion. The young mortals will just get older people, like me, to buy the games for them ... Click here to view this comment.

#158. Posted on October 09, 2005 02:29 PM. Hm, I also seem to be facing some difficulty desciphering the words from the giberish. Do let me know when you have repaired this and I'll gladly return to give your story a full critique. ... Click here to view this comment.

#159. Posted on October 03, 2005 10:51 AM. Perhaps it would be a good idea to add a note to the news post; asking the visitors to kindly hold their submissions until the problem is resolved-to help prevent a massive overflow of new items once the problem is fixed. ... Click here to view this comment.

#160. Posted on October 01, 2005 02:31 AM. ummm, I don't get it, but I am good at spouting old wisdom. Here's some free pieces for all you mortals out there: "All that lives can be slain." -Conan the Barbarian "Even in the darkness, there is still light." -Dreco, the last Dragon "And within thou, a great power lay hidden; the strength of eternity, courage of the ages, and the wisdom of the past." -the immortal deadfast, Battle.net account description "I've gotta get me one ... Click here to view this comment.

#161. Posted on September 27, 2005 08:26 AM. To be honest, I cannot say that, for a time, I didn't despise you and ihatezerg for your efforts against Bane and its fans, but that has long passed. To this day, I still carried a small peice of this, but now I have discarded that as well; You just said that you regret what you did. You have always believed in the morallity of your battles with a firm stance and an unswayable resolve, yet in this case, you have shown compunction for your actions. For this noble endeavor, I commend you. Cons ... Click here to view this comment.

#162. Posted on September 26, 2005 01:18 PM. Well, well someone mentioned...oh, a false alarm. Hey-you shouldn't abuse my...ability that way ... Click here to view this comment.

#163. Posted on September 25, 2005 09:22 PM. Gwahahaha! I knew someone would mention that, LumosaBrood. " ...when you pretend your a immortal hydralisk. thats kinda a cheap shot (he he that one cracks me up, inside joke for vets)" ... Click here to view this comment.

#164. Posted on September 25, 2005 11:37 AM. Of course; I should have sensed as much. On an offhanded subject, I've hired a professional illustrator for Bane and you can see a preview of her work on the FanArt list. Drop some words for it when you get a chance, would you? ... Click here to view this comment.

#165. Posted on September 25, 2005 08:55 AM. thus is why you are my opposite. Makes alot of sense if you think about it. ... Click here to view this comment.

#166. Posted on September 25, 2005 12:03 AM. Like I said, it's difficult to explain; but I'll give it a go anyway. You see, I used to have a certain impact on the mortals whenever I spoke on Starcraft.org. When I first started writing, I never had to advertise or ask anyone to read. I wrote and the viewers came; it was as simple as that. It was the same with any comment made just about anywhere on the site; when I said or asked something, two-dozen people would have responded to it by the days end. Needless to say, I seem to have lost this ... Click here to view this comment.

#167. Posted on September 24, 2005 12:37 PM. I'm not sure how to explain it; the details are somewhat difficult to understand, but its more of an ability than a privilege. Yet, in a way; it suppose a unique sbility could be considered a privilege. To be frank, though, you are correct about the assumption for no suspects; I cannot think of any one mortal capable of such a thing either. ... Click here to view this comment.

#168. Posted on September 22, 2005 11:44 AM. I would like to help you, and I used to be quite capable of it, but that priveledge has been...taken from me. ... Click here to view this comment.

#169. Posted on September 19, 2005 09:44 AM. Odd, it appears that they designed the zergling two different ways; as much time as Blizzard takes to produce each game, one would believe that somebody would catch such a slip-up somewhere along the line. Or possibly there are actually two kinds of zergling; I suppose the four-legged one doesn't have the Metabolic Boost upgrade yet. Eiher way, Ima' have to go back and check the first scenematic again; I refered to the introduction to Broodwar simply because it offers the best views available ... Click here to view this comment.

#170. Posted on September 18, 2005 10:12 PM. Dumb F*ker, am I? No offense taken; Actually, according to the scenematic scene used for the introduction of Broodwar, it is clearly shown that zerglings actually have only four limbs-the hind legs and the long arms with scythes. Go back and take a look for yourselves, I speak the truth. I've seen the 6-legged design used quite often, it doesn't really matter; the drawing itself is very well done. Action pics are hard to get right sometimes, good work. ... Click here to view this comment.

#171. Posted on September 17, 2005 11:24 AM. "...Whens Bane 14 coming?" Ah! It's good to hear that again! Hm, it's tough to say exactly when, but I can say this: It's about 35 complete as of right now-I've been kinda busy updating my website. ... Click here to view this comment.

#172. Posted on September 16, 2005 06:21 AM. I do believe everyone is entitled to their own opinion, but breaking a story down scene by scene is a bit much. How could one judge a chapter's quality by such miniscule aspects of its structure? I suppose I'm thankful that no one critiques **** in such a way, I wouldn't know where to start the next installment. Good luck with chapter 5, my mortal opposite. ... Click here to view this comment.

#173. Posted on September 13, 2005 09:17 PM. I more or less suck at drawing but my illustrator is very talented ... Click here to view this comment.

#174. Posted on September 11, 2005 01:53 PM. Indeed, Yellow speaks the truth; he's the one who introduced me to Becky. ... Click here to view this comment.

#175. Posted on September 10, 2005 02:10 AM. I thought about that myself, but then decided that it would be better if the depiction reflected Blizzard's verion of a hydralisk. It may look like any other hydralisk, but you have nothing to compare it too. If you were to draw a height scale next to this hydralisk, you would see that this creature truly is Bane. Bane is just over ten feet tall. Your average hydralisk is around 8 to 9 feet in height. Can you imagine Charley standing next to Bane in this picture? (Charley is just barely over 6 f ... Click here to view this comment.

#176. Posted on September 09, 2005 11:22 AM. Upon first sight, this depiction of a hydralisk took my breath away ... Click here to view this comment.

#177. Posted on September 09, 2005 11:19 AM. Not a problem, my mortal opposite. Off-subject comments don't bother me in the least so long as the conversation matter is not either A) An arguement or B)Aggression against the Bane fans ... Click here to view this comment.

#178. Posted on September 09, 2005 12:07 AM. I remember reading this piece ages ago, when the site was young. Definately an excelent read that deserves its place amoung the legends. Congradulations, DeltaSquad! And wow, they used my comment on it too. That's something you don't see every day. ... Click here to view this comment.

#179. Posted on August 23, 2005 11:21 PM. Once again, the immortal deadfast is the first to comment on The Exile's newest release. Behold, my critique; Ah, a well rounded follow-up to the last installment. It picked up were the other one left off and kept up the same pace. The action scenes were descriptive and flowed well, but that isn't what made this a 'well rounded follow-up'. I'm glad to see that you included more dialogue between the exile and 'Henry'. Although the exile seems a bit...merciless in his quest for revenge, as seen ... Click here to view this comment.

#180. Posted on July 27, 2005 01:27 PM. 0.o Yay! ... Click here to view this comment.

#181. Posted on July 27, 2005 01:02 PM. so THATS why the number of readers has dropped so dramatically from one season to the next. Thank you, rightoues peeps, for bringing this to my attention. I was thinking more along the lines of "the bigger, the better", but you have a good point-this is supposed to be a short story. I'll try to consider this the next time I submit a chapter; although it may prove to be somewhat...challenging to break the habit. And by the way, don't hesitate to point out any bad points you see in th ... Click here to view this comment.

#182. Posted on July 25, 2005 05:56 PM. are they actually too long to read? Hm...I didn't think that was possible. Is the length a bad thing? ... Click here to view this comment.

#183. Posted on July 21, 2005 05:21 PM. Cash is king. Of course, once someone is selected to be an illustrator, I'd need a valid mailing address to send the money to. Doesn't sound too safe, but for what its worth in black and white, I assure you that I would use the address solely for sending payments, and it would be kept under the utmost secrecy. It's how I sent the winner of the contest question on my site his/her 50 dollar cash prize(I only know the person by screen name. I no longer have their adress, it was destroyed immead ... Click here to view this comment.

#184. Posted on July 21, 2005 02:55 PM. Indeed, I would definately consider having multiple illustrators. To bad I can't announce this as a news post, huh? There's gotta be somebody out there who wants to get paid to draw (I'm actually quite serious about the ten-bucks or more per drawing thing). ... Click here to view this comment.

#185. Posted on July 21, 2005 08:02 AM. Do excuse the following comment, I've been waiting for someplace appropriate enough to announce this "odd job" for some time and now seems most reasonable. I've been searching for an illustrator for the Bane series for ages, (my own artistic ability is reasonable, but I want some picture-perfect stuff). If theres anyone out there that is fully confident in their ability with a pencil (or pen), draw me up a hydralisk and send it to my email adress, illsmokum@yahoo.com. If the ... Click here to view this comment.

#186. Posted on July 20, 2005 01:44 PM. Who? Me? ... Click here to view this comment.

#187. Posted on July 15, 2005 09:14 PM. Actually, the arm crunch thing was Bane's arm snapping back into place naturally. You see, all zerg species have the capability to regrow lost carapace, tissue and bone structure at an accelerated rate, so long as theres fuel to supply the equally accelerated metabolism rate. ... Click here to view this comment.

#188. Posted on July 15, 2005 04:17 AM. I wouldn't mind being on a fiction review board ... Click here to view this comment.

#189. Posted on July 14, 2005 12:59 PM. My most sincere gratitude is yours, my most righteous readers (Especially you contradiction. Alternately, the only chain that binds me to this site is the un-ending chance to bring everyone another Bane intallment) Where not for you, Bane wouldn't have made it past chapter 3. Ah, I can begin Bane 14 now ... Click here to view this comment.

#190. Posted on July 12, 2005 02:32 PM. Blast, it seems that the staff are ignoring me as well. Its nearly been a week since I've sent word to them about this problem. In this case, would you mind critiquing my newest installment yourself? Its available in my list of works, next to the rating system in all the Bane chapters. ... Click here to view this comment.

#191. Posted on July 11, 2005 03:36 AM. As have I, and I also have yet to recieve a response. This would be very discouraging to most writers, to have a two months of work (totaling to 16 pages of size 10 font, to be exact) being discarded; good thing I'm immortal, or this may have dampened spirits for the next chapter. ... Click here to view this comment.

#192. Posted on July 10, 2005 12:32 PM. Odd, the very same problem has happened to the chapter I just submitted; Its there, but its not on the new fiction list. Most disappointing :/ ... Click here to view this comment.