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#1. Posted on July 02, 2008 06:58 PM.
Exceptionally good. Best story of its kind that I've seen. And the ending makes perfect sense if you think about it, even for both sides of the realities. ...
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#2. Posted on June 23, 2008 07:05 AM.
An excellent piece of work for your first piece. If you revise it send me a pm, and also keep this version up for others to compare The protoss encounter was an unexpected twist but fit in perfectly. One thing from my quick read though, when you had Scope walking out you could have written a descriptive entry of a minor fight and placed it in to give a "scope" of the feeling. ...
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#3. Posted on June 23, 2008 06:49 AM.
I like to watch the pro reps They do stuff I can't (like win a TvP battle, and go on to win, keyword is and) and not get raped in TvZ. ...
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#4. Posted on June 23, 2008 06:45 AM.
I count eight comments from people, and six votes...seriously it doesn't take that long to vote, a lot shorter than writing a comment anyways. It is nice to see a new twist on stories that I haven't seen yet on the site. Very well done, you never even say which one is 100% correct. Also, I am thinking of rereading the revenant series again The first part of this story makes so much more sense now that I've read this whole part though. I'll wait for DoctorOctopus's criticism before I ...
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#5. Posted on June 22, 2008 11:10 AM.
9.5/ 10. Excellent, I like the story set- up, exceptional. I'll always be a candle light away ...
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#6. Posted on June 14, 2008 06:23 PM.
Good. Forgot to comment when I read this story before, so here I am with no criticism. Waiting for the second one (don't let us down!) ...
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#7. Posted on June 14, 2008 06:21 PM.
I liked it. I'll give it a good. It was a nice attempt at describing a full scale battle, but you try to describe every detail. It's okay though, I had the same problem ^^. Also, this part bugged me. "They rescued much of their battalion, but saw many of their army’s corpses on the ground." It could have been written different, because it seems kind of pointless in saying much, and many in a sentence that describes two different opposites in a sentence. I also missed the first par ...
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#8. Posted on June 04, 2008 06:25 PM.
Good, but still hard to read, because you need to separate the story better. When people are talking, separate each of their speeches with a space in between the other person's. Look at deadfast's work, or one of the other better writers for a guide. And you don't need to use more than one exclamation point, and don't use words like "yeah, oof, and augh." Instead you could just say, "Jimmy gave a roar of despair as *event here." Or something like that. Still good, and you ...
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#9. Posted on May 31, 2008 12:07 AM.
I laughed when I heard jello ...
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#10. Posted on May 30, 2008 10:24 PM.
Exceptional. ...
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#11. Posted on May 24, 2008 09:38 PM.
I just read one, and then four. I think I missed out on a lot... ...
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#12. Posted on May 24, 2008 09:00 PM.
I'll give it a weak good. A good improvement from your first one, but in the two last paragraphs, and through the story it is kind of confusing when you change the points of views between the characters. You could change this by just putting three or two spaces between those paragraphs. ...
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#13. Posted on May 23, 2008 11:10 PM.
Hey I remember this. One of my favorite stories back in the day Browsed through this, and it looks exceptional. I'll read through it more thoroughly when I get some more time. ...
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#14. Posted on May 23, 2008 10:59 PM.
I was thinking he read starship troopers too as I read through it Damn, I had some criticism for one slight in grammar, but know I can't remember it. Oh well, exceptional. btw I also like the Engineer, and main character talking bit, gives character development to the two of them. ...
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#15. Posted on May 23, 2008 10:34 PM.
I agree with everything deadfast said ^^ But also, there is some things like this in there "“Absolutely. The brood has increased its deceleration” I know it makes sesne, but you could phrase it a different way also. Such as "the brood has decreased its velocity and is slowing to a halt." Something about that whole positive/negative thing doesn't jive with people, but yeah, listen to deadfast. ...
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#16. Posted on May 13, 2008 09:58 AM.
^^ Agree with what deadfast said. But emphasize the lines, because it just makes it easier to read, like deadfast said (look at his work for examples) ...
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#17. Posted on May 13, 2008 09:51 AM.
*zo my gosh. Don't shoot! I'm a reader Hopped over to the shorty story section, and decided to check out the short stories. Sigh, no one reads any stories anymore (*shakes head). I can't believe you wanted to delete this though, it is exceptional. Only error I see is "The weekly supply drops Command had promised are several seasons late." You could've phrased it a different way, and taken out the weekly. ...
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#18. Posted on April 24, 2008 12:48 AM.
First comment And btw I'm one of the newer members, I've been around a year. I heard about how the bane series was fantastic so I went looking for it, and found it exceptional. I'll read up on it again, because for some reason I missed fifteen coming out. But, from what I remember Bane was an exceptional piece of writing. Sleep calls to me though right now ...
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#19. Posted on April 24, 2008 12:40 AM.
It's the time point in Brood wars where Kerrigan convinced the Protoss to work with her. I'll give it a good, but I will hold some disagreeance with the way the protoss, kerrigan, and hte medic act. Otherwise, pretty good. ...
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#20. Posted on April 10, 2008 02:24 PM.
Well its interesting and not that bad of grammar, but it's a story basically about a supersoldier (which I don't particularly like, and you usually write yourself into a corner). You placed it in the command center where Raynor is, but one thing is there suits weren't red, because they hadn't joined the sons of korhal yet. Still good for a prologue, and it'll be interesting to see where you go with it. Good ...
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#21. Posted on April 01, 2008 11:04 AM.
It would be exceptional, but you use in game statistics for certain things. Look at Snot's UED's earlier chapters, or X9s for a reference. Even the starcraft novels don't use them as much as you do ...
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#22. Posted on March 31, 2008 09:51 PM.
Good. One of the problems I have though is you try to make Daniel seem completely confident in himself, but than in another part make him unsure of himself. You give a battle analysis view of the battles now, which is good considering your telling the story from Daniel's perspective. One thing that bugs me is why is a Magistrate cruising around on a dropship. And I didn't know they equipped dropships with world to world communications, but it's your story and not mine and I can see a reason ...
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#23. Posted on March 31, 2008 08:05 AM.
YAY COMMENTS! I might get around to explaining why Owens was so pissed, but you have to remember he was a lieutenant commander (or w/e he is). Although those people should be pissed because Delta Squad was still on the cruiser. Hence the "can we get some help" and "cut the comm" Ahh, I see though. I wrote this a long time ago, and freshened it up a bit. Basically Delta Squad was carrying a tactical nuke with them to plant and gtfo out of the KMDCcruiser but they got pinned do ...
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#24. Posted on March 23, 2008 01:07 PM.
Umm, woops. This isn't related to MoD, and is supposed to be in the Guild Wars series lol. I'll fix it when I can edit it ...
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#25. Posted on March 23, 2008 01:05 PM.
Ah, well nice to see some people make connections but I'll give an explanation in one of the next chapters of what is going in with this section of his life. ...
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#26. Posted on March 23, 2008 01:01 PM.
Ya I accidentally erased my comments before submitting it >< so here's a short versoin Good, a few errors here and there. A turnaround from chapter one but I'm sure you'll piece it together. ...
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#27. Posted on March 10, 2008 10:22 PM.
Exceptional,bit short but still exceptional. I like the ambush in the city the best. Too tired, must sleep though. ...
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#28. Posted on February 25, 2008 04:50 PM.
Since Raynor's last name is Raynor, I put that into it. James Raynor did not die, but his son did. Sorry for any confusion this may have caused. ...
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#29. Posted on February 24, 2008 09:58 PM.
I'll agree with infested terran on this one. Couple more things. Showing ghosts as humans I'll give props too as well as your entire story. Good stuff. Some very minor grammatical erros that are exceptionally hard to notice but most people have them unless they iron it out. ...
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#30. Posted on February 24, 2008 09:52 PM.
Hmm, interesting. ...
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#31. Posted on February 24, 2008 05:20 PM.
yes I'm saying Jimmy had a son So say the starcraft novels if you pay close attention. It is in Liberty's crusade if you pay attention. I just put it so he dies in my ghost program. All I have to say for the last post is, MUHAHAHAHAHHAHAHA. Call me the evil scientist that toys with people's thoughts ...
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#32. Posted on February 15, 2008 12:27 AM.
Hmm, how do protoss speak lol. Seriously still kind of short.If it's a prologue you should put that, or make it longer. Also flesh out the detail more. what does the character look like etc. ...
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#33. Posted on February 14, 2008 12:29 AM.
Hmm. Thought I posted this a while back. Oh well. As always comments are acceptable. Not exactly sure what this contains because I wrote it before my break spanning months. ...
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#34. Posted on January 29, 2008 07:37 PM.
Decent, but now you put me into suspense for Alexi Dugalle. Named after Alexi Stukove perhaps? I'm just wondering wtf is he doing, and how they thought they beat the zerg. DAMN YOU SUSPENSE! O_O ...
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#35. Posted on January 29, 2008 07:32 PM.
GJ Seethererific. That's the general broad view, but there is some plot later that'll help you see the whole theme/motifs. I'm just trying to decide wether, or not to include all of the time at the academy or not. ...
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#36. Posted on January 29, 2008 07:29 PM.
1st. Mapping FTW! ...
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#37. Posted on January 20, 2008 11:17 PM.
I'll give it a good, but try breaking it up, especially when people are talking. If your going to use an acronym, its grammatically correct to put the full name of it first rather than just the acronym. But than again I may have not read your other stories so yeah. First time I've seen this. When I get some free time I'll read the other stories you have. ...
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#38. Posted on January 18, 2008 10:26 PM.
Idk, they're fighting on teh Treggors home turf where full military installations crumpled under their weight, and ghosts still died. But he still only said one. Should've made a sectioned off grave yard for trophy kills (as in multiple). But stepping over tree trunks the size of battlecruisers? ...
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#39. Posted on November 20, 2007 10:06 PM.
Try breaking up your story, and people talking with some blank lines. Just look at some stories, and you'll see what I mean. If you're trying to paste directly from microsoft word with paragraphs it won't work anyways ...
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#40. Posted on November 05, 2007 01:02 PM.
Very good stuff. Liked the wild-cat chain reaction description. Only thing I have a slight problem with is the THOOM THOOM THOOM at the beginning, and that the nuclear cell would probably not be hidden so well. But it hardly detracts from the story. =Exceptional= ...
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#41. Posted on October 24, 2007 11:26 PM.
First comment! Woot dedicated sc comics! ...
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#42. Posted on October 24, 2007 01:17 PM.
First Post! Graham ate my babies (Why does the spoof vote always win lol) ...
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#43. Posted on October 18, 2007 10:55 AM.
First post! Starcraft is in the spotlight. I'm going to train to become an e-athlete, and a regular athlete. ...
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#44. Posted on October 17, 2007 10:05 AM.
First post! I have never followed this. All I knew about it was Koreans dominated. ...
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#45. Posted on October 16, 2007 10:26 PM.
Wow. No one has complemented on this amazing concept they implemented. I'll be hte first. Good job AJ. :/ ...
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#46. Posted on October 14, 2007 10:42 PM.
First Comment! Woot! a=/=b Maybe there's something else here. Like the cost of a system that could actually run 3d games in the ninety's. Just a hypothesis though. Who wouldn't want to play starcraft in 3d? ...
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#47. Posted on October 11, 2007 03:55 PM.
Control alt delete comics is better. They're most recent (so a couple months ago) starcraft comic is hilarious. ...
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#48. Posted on October 09, 2007 07:15 PM.
Stukov is back with the hyperevolutionary virus!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I have a question though. If kerrigan killed all of the cerebrates than how did a cerebrate reincarnate Stukov? The easy answer is that was the last cerebrate, and was incinerated by the orbital bombardment, or it occured soon after the brood wars. But that means there is hope for Kerrigan and Raynor still has his death oath. Stukov got the cure for the infestation so....I'm so confused. So is he uninfested, or have amazing st ...
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#49. Posted on October 05, 2007 02:30 PM.
First post! (maybe) I'm more of a terran player (trying anyways), so I can't believe they freaking brought them back! Lol. Anyways, they probably got rid of the carrier's anti-ground shield. But the real question is did they nerf the carriers? In starcraft carriers did five damage per interceptor, and battlecruisers had three armor. This is without accounting for upgrades. So each interceptor does two damage to a normal bc not accounting for upgrades. But the battlecruiser didn't yamato. ...
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#50. Posted on September 25, 2007 03:15 PM.
I'll follow crazyman's super long post.... ====New storyline (my vote here) They bumped it a decade or so in the future I think, so it'll be interesting to see what happened to Kerrigan. From the intro, it looks like she got owned by something. Also, it looks like Arcturus Mengsk managed to consolidate his power, and Umoja is still there too. ===New gameplay, mapping, and modding features. It's the twenty first century. I wonder if the people that made the original starcraft are sti ...
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#51. Posted on September 25, 2007 10:14 AM.
Go character development!!! Interesting to see what you do with the action in the next story. Some minor grammar issues, but it's still pretty good. ...
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#52. Posted on September 19, 2007 12:17 AM.
You complain about not using 4 scvs on gas, because of the waste of supply. But isn't sending the fourth scv to scout a waste of supply? Because that one mineral he takes in will increase the time for your next scv, so ergo your opponent already has a small time advantage on you. ...
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#53. Posted on September 13, 2007 08:15 AM.
Reapers shooting out of specially modified windows on a dropship? Not your best work, but hopefully you can do better. ...
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#54. Posted on September 12, 2007 11:07 AM.
When I get some time I'll reread this stuff. Technical, descricptive, dialogue, plot, more meaning. Yup, I need to reread this when I get some more time, and I will. Maybe I'll reread the fearless incident too just for kicks. Exceptional. Lol, Ragnorok-the orgy of violence machine. ...
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#55. Posted on September 11, 2007 11:53 AM.
Making some minor modifications to the story. Such as number of troops in AMC, AMC weight, and minor grammar errors that I caught. I'll check later tonight, and see if I can edit it. Shouldn't make that much of a change to the overall story though. ...
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#56. Posted on September 09, 2007 09:18 PM.
I'm not going to comment until I see more character development. ...
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#57. Posted on September 06, 2007 07:59 PM.
Maybe. I decided to keep the flashbacks through the story. Cuz' it's original!!!! (I think?) ...
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#58. Posted on September 05, 2007 08:37 PM.
he parried a lung, and meets instead of met sommeone. Only minor complaints compared to.... HOLY SHIT EXCEPTIONAL!!!!! I call it the new rating system of H.S.E. If you are not a religious person you can replace Holy with Hot. You left the story open though. So the real question is Joe dead? Tiff survives maybe, and Kerrigan raped his mind. Personally I like the story. Are you leaving it open though. ...
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#59. Posted on September 05, 2007 01:38 PM.
Instead of hundreds of mutalisks, etc. put thousands, because there is already hundreds of ships. If the ships were all fighting they wouldn't all turn starboard. Just some minor things I noticed, but I liked the story, especially the part witht the exploding battlecruiser. Didn't you say there were two hundred thousand Adun's fleet people, and only hundreds of zerg ships plus hundreds of zerg flyers.They outnumber the swarm... ...
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#60. Posted on August 30, 2007 12:26 PM.
I liked the story, but there were some better ones in this series. It was pretty short, and they seem to be handing out promotions left, and right though Whatever happened to Magistrate Collins? ...
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#61. Posted on August 22, 2007 08:11 PM.
Comment please. Such as -What you think of the series. -Ways I can improve my writing. -whatever you think of... ...
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#62. Posted on August 17, 2007 03:24 PM.
Ya the whole drug thing might come into play again later if I remember, and I'm not going to give away anything else. But I wrote most of this stuff at night. I don't know why but know I have to fix it. -Disfunxional Won ...
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#63. Posted on August 10, 2007 06:55 PM.
iFRAG, iPISTOL, It's all the same. ...
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#64. Posted on August 02, 2007 09:18 AM.
81 views, two votes, and two comments including mine. Can someone critique my writing more please. ...
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#65. Posted on July 31, 2007 08:08 PM.
So Kerrigan wants Jimmy. I thought it was the guy that goes after the girl. Oh wait, damn, I kind of did the same thing in my story. I want to see chapter 3, but without the whole storytelling feeling. But I'm a pretty new writer, so don't take anything I say to seriously. ...
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#66. Posted on July 25, 2007 02:54 PM.
Go Lord of the Flies. Simon isn't really a truthseeker though. He is the kid that is all good, and the author tries to prove his point that you have to have some evil in you to survive by killling him. Its a good comparison to Jesus, but not a great example for a truth seeker. That character is a device used to get the author's main point across. Anyways for Stukov, couldn't the casket have landed on a planet inhabited by the Zerg, been infested, and brought back alive. I like it though, s ...
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#67. Posted on July 24, 2007 02:36 PM.
"Hell, its about time." -Tychus Findly Not bad at all, I like the new look. ...
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#68. Posted on July 24, 2007 11:09 AM.
Shouldn't you be able to heal? ...
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#69. Posted on July 23, 2007 03:53 PM.
I have a few complaints. "Stack had given specific orders not to destroy that building. He would need that to get Drake out of here alive. Kerrigan wanted to tell him in person that he helped her destroy his pitiful civilization." So he's infested, and kerrigan is going to gloat over him? "I’m workin on it.” Joe yelled back, aiming. He pulled the trigger and the sound he wanted to hear came out. A huge explosion came from the weapon, launching the explosive from the barre ...
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#70. Posted on June 27, 2007 03:19 PM.
I didn't like the way you separated the chapter, and intro. Some grammatical errors such as misspelling colony, and capitalizing identification, device, and security. Good start with the character though, go Anderson!!!! But seriously, Jackson Anderson, why end his first, and last name with son. Good, because it is the beginning, and his last name is Anderson. ...
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#71. Posted on June 26, 2007 09:37 AM.
Wow... twenty four transport units. I have never built above four transport units, including in the missions, unless I was zerg. Twenty four transport units=48 food, which is almost a quarter of your max army size. Not to mention if you are terran dropships cost vespene also. That just seems impractical to me. ...
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#72. Posted on June 21, 2007 07:02 PM.
Incredibly amazing poem. What college did you go to, I am just assuming that you went to college with your superb understanding of English. Just wondersing so I could steal it if my english teacher ever says get an example of the best friggin' poem out there, then I bust out my notebook, find it on starcraft.org, and be like bam, its right there. No point in going through your musty old books, because the future is starcraft (II). ...
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#73. Posted on June 21, 2007 06:11 PM.
Have you read 1984? I see some similarities in the two stories, but not much, just in the ending really. Freaking amazing story though. I know the comment is way late, but I had to write it. ...
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#74. Posted on June 21, 2007 03:58 PM.
Undead 52 is wrong, it has drugs. That is what the stimpacks are, "that's the stuff." I smell a movie out of this series. Haven't finished it yet, I'll comment more on the last one. ...
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#75. Posted on June 06, 2007 01:32 PM.
I'm giving it an exceptional because of the palm pilot. I like the story. It is different and new, but it could still be better with more realism. ...
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#76. Posted on June 06, 2007 12:46 PM.
Vast improvement over your final war series. I still see some room for improvement. I'll give you a good, so I can give you can give you an exceptional later when your writing improves again. Also, the queens launch broodlings to infest, and explode enemy units. Parasites don't harm the unit, and just allow the queen to see where the unit is. ...
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#77. Posted on June 06, 2007 12:20 PM.
As Mutalisk332 told GanthridorII earlier, a history of the races is listed in, approximately up to the point of the Protoss anhilating one of the Terran planets and leaving http://www.sclegacy.com/encyclopedia/race_histories.php. I thought you were trying to stick to the storyline. You asked for some more comments, and I have given one. I'll still give your story a good though. ...
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#78. Posted on June 06, 2007 11:04 AM.
It will be interesting to see what someone's ideas on ghost training are, and if they are different. Could use more detail, but I still like the story. Hope you are writing the next one with more detail. ...
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#79. Posted on June 05, 2007 11:26 AM.
You need to finish the series. The story so far has been good, and this part wasn't that bad. I was still confused on the part of what happened with the stairs. It appears you just killed all of the marines, and let Metzen go unscathed. ...
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#80. Posted on June 01, 2007 11:48 AM.
I'll need to reread this, and watch armagedom again. I thought the bomb just cracked the asteroid in two though, and sent it off course, or it might have been another apocolypse show. Good story though. ...
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Do you enjoy watching StarCraft games played between pros?
Yes
(56%, 70 votes)
Yes - 70 votes (56%)
No
(10%, 13 votes)
No - 13 votes (10%)
I don't watch enough to be able to form an informed opinion, really
(34%, 43 votes)
I don't watch enough to be able to form an informed opinion, really - 43 votes (34%)